唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and coherent. Try to avoid short, fragmented sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be careful with word choice and grammar, for example, 'after studying after pressure' is unclear. Aim to express your ideas in complete sentences with appropriate vocabulary.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing, especially songs by Taylor Swift. I find that singing helps me to recharge my energy and express my emotions freely. Moreover, it is a positive way for me to relax and unwind after studying and dealing with stress.

建議: Your answer is informative and mostly well-structured. To improve, try to avoid long sentences with multiple ideas; instead, break them into shorter, clearer sentences. Also, use linking words like 'for example' or 'in addition' to make your answer more coherent. Pay attention to verb tenses and article usage for accuracy.

範例: Yes, I took singing lessons when I was in primary school. The teacher taught me basic musical skills, such as rhythm and pitch. I attended these classes two or three times a week, which really helped me to improve my vocal skills.

建議: Your answer is honest but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organise your ideas logically and use linking words to connect them. Avoid grammatical errors such as 'being making comments' and unclear phrases like 'give myself a song'. Also, try to keep your sentences concise and relevant to the question.

範例: Actually, I have to admit that I don't have a very good singing voice. Therefore, I prefer to sing alone, usually songs by Taylor Swift, because I feel shy about being judged by others.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. To improve, focus on expressing your ideas clearly and logically. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid vague references like 'the article that I read earlier' without explanation. Also, ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and complete.

範例: Definitely, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions. This emotional expression can lead to a more positive mood and better mental health, as some studies have shown.

× Also express my emotion freely.

✓ I also express my emotions freely.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it a sentence fragment. Adding 'I' as the subject and 'express' as the verb completes the sentence structure. Additionally, 'emotion' should be plural as it refers to feelings in general.

× Overall, it is a positive way for me to unwind after studying after pressure.

✓ Overall, it is a positive way for me to unwind after studying and after pressure.

The phrase 'after studying after pressure' is unclear and lacks proper conjunction. Adding 'and' clarifies that the speaker unwinds after both studying and experiencing pressure.

× I used to take singing lessons during primary school.

✓ I used to take singing lessons during primary school.

This sentence is correct in past tense usage; no correction needed.

× I usually attended this class for about two or three times a week, and this really helped me to improve my vocal skills.

✓ I usually attended this class about two or three times a week, and this really helped me to improve my vocal skills.

The phrase 'for about two or three times a week' is incorrect because 'times' with 'for' is not standard. Removing 'for' makes the expression correct.

× Actually, I have to admit that I have a very bad voice and I feel like I just need to give myself a song, a song of Taylor Swift that I mentioned earlier and I'm scared of being making comments by other people when I'm saying so yes please singing to myself.

✓ Actually, I have to admit that I have a very bad voice and I feel like I just need to sing a Taylor Swift song that I mentioned earlier. I'm scared of receiving comments from other people when I sing, so yes, I prefer singing to myself.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'give myself a song' is incorrect; it should be 'sing a song'. 'Being making comments' is incorrect; 'receiving comments' is appropriate. The sentence is also run-on and unclear, so it was split and rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Definitely yes, when a person can express or her emotion through the song.

✓ Definitely yes, when a person can express their emotions through a song.

The phrase 'express or her emotion' is incorrect. It should be 'express their emotions' to be gender-neutral and grammatically correct. Also, 'through the song' is better as 'through a song' for generality.

× So she can probably be in a positive being healthier as the government increased.

✓ So she can probably be in a positive state and healthier, as the government has increased support.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'Be in a positive being healthier' is not a correct phrase. It was rephrased to 'be in a positive state and healthier'. The phrase 'as the government increased' is incomplete; adding 'support' clarifies the meaning.

× Like the article that I read earlier.

✓ This is like the article that I read earlier.

The original sentence is a fragment lacking a subject and verb. Adding 'This is' completes the sentence.