唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is good but try to make it more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'helps me'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say 'I have loved singing since I was five years old, and I still take professional classes which help improve my vocals.'

範例: Yes, I have loved singing since I was five years old. I usually sing with instruments like the harmonium and chords. Moreover, I still take classes from a professional tutor, which really helps improve my vocals.

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and incomplete sentences. Make your answer clear and structured with linking words. Also, use correct tenses and vocabulary. For example, say 'Yes, I have learned from professional tutors in my country, and I am still learning because music is a lifelong journey.'

範例: Yes, I have learned singing from professional tutors in my country. Furthermore, I am still learning because music is a lifelong journey, and I continue to work on improving my vocals and clarity.

建議: Your answer is heartfelt but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words. Also, use more precise vocabulary. For example, instead of 'with lots of great word', say 'with meaningful words'.

範例: I sing for my God, mainly religious hymns. I really enjoy praising the Creator through meaningful words, and it makes me feel elated to express my love to Him.

建議: Good answer with clear ideas. To improve, use linking words and more precise vocabulary. For example, say 'Yes, I believe singing is an activity that promotes mental well-being and inner happiness because it allows you to express your emotions clearly and be your true self.'

範例: Yes, I believe singing is an activity that promotes mental well-being and inner happiness. This is because it allows you to express your emotions clearly and feel your true self.

× I have been singing when I was five years old.

✓ I have been singing since I was five years old.

The original sentence incorrectly combines present perfect continuous tense with a past time expression 'when I was five years old'. The phrase 'since I was five years old' correctly indicates the starting point of an action continuing to the present.

× I sing with instrument, chord, harmonium.

✓ I sing with instruments, chords, and harmonium.

The nouns 'instrument' and 'chord' should be plural to correctly refer to multiple items. Also, 'chord' should be pluralized to 'chords' to match the context.

× Yes, uh, I had learned from the professional tutors in my country and I was still learning because music is a very long lasting, I would say a procedure and I'm still working on my vocals and a page to, to sing more clearly and.

✓ Yes, uh, I learned from professional tutors in my country and I am still learning because music is a very long-lasting, I would say, process and I'm still working on my vocals and a way to sing more clearly.

The past perfect 'had learned' is unnecessary here; simple past 'learned' is appropriate. 'Long lasting' should be hyphenated as 'long-lasting' when used as an adjective. 'Procedure' is better replaced with 'process' in this context. The phrase 'a page to' is incorrect and replaced with 'a way to' for clarity.

× I sing for my God.

✓ I sing to my God.

The verb 'sing' is commonly followed by the preposition 'to' when indicating the recipient of the singing, so 'sing to my God' is more appropriate.

× I enjoy singing for the creator and praising him by singing with with lots of great word.

✓ I enjoy singing for the Creator and praising Him by singing with lots of great words.

'Creator' and 'Him' are capitalized as they refer to a deity. The phrase 'with with' is a repetition error and corrected to a single 'with'. 'Word' should be plural 'words' to match 'lots of'.

× I feel singing is the one of the activities that can help with mental well-being and the inner happiness because you can clearly show your expressions while singing and you feel the real you.

✓ I feel singing is one of the activities that can help with mental well-being and inner happiness because you can clearly show your expressions while singing and feel your true self.

The phrase 'the one of the activities' is incorrect; it should be 'one of the activities'. 'The inner happiness' is better as 'inner happiness' without 'the'. 'You feel the real you' is awkward and improved to 'feel your true self' for clarity and naturalness.