唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid filler words like 'Hmm' and 'And yeah'. Also, use consistent capitalization and avoid redundancy. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons.

範例: Yes, I have loved singing since I was a child because it brings me joy and peace of mind. Singing has always been a way for me to relax and express my feelings.

建議: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structures. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: I have never formally learned how to sing, but I believe I was naturally gifted with a good voice. If I had the chance to take singing lessons, I think my vocal skills would improve, and I hope to learn proper techniques in the future.

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your ideas more clearly and use linking words to show contrast. Also, avoid redundancy and awkward phrases like 'a lot of a big crowd'.

範例: Although I am afraid of performing in front of people, I would like to sing for a large audience as well as for my family. Singing for my loved ones would be a special experience, and performing on stage would help me overcome my fear.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting the first sentence and making the explanation more fluent. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples to support your opinion.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. Not only does it uplift their mood, but it also allows them to express various emotions such as sadness, grief, or anger through music, which can be very therapeutic.

× It gave me such a joyful and a Peace of Mind too.

✓ It gave me such joy and peace of mind too.

The phrase 'a Peace of Mind' incorrectly uses the definite article 'a' before an uncountable noun phrase. 'Peace of mind' is an uncountable expression and should not have an article. Also, 'joyful' is an adjective, but here a noun 'joy' fits better to parallel 'peace of mind'.

× I've never learned how to sing, I feel like it was just some gift that was given to me from a young age.

✓ I've never learned how to sing; I feel like it was just a gift that was given to me from a young age.

The sentence is a run-on and needs proper punctuation. Also, 'some gift' is less precise than 'a gift' in this context. Using a semicolon or period separates the two independent clauses correctly.

× I do have the voice, however if I did learn how to vocalize, I would've.

✓ I do have the voice; however, if I learned how to vocalize, I would have.

The modal verb phrase 'I would've' is incomplete without the main verb. Also, 'did learn' is better expressed as 'learned' in the conditional clause. Proper punctuation and conjunction usage improve clarity.

× My vocal cords would've gotten much much better and I wish to learn how to sing one day.

✓ My vocal cords would have gotten much better, and I wish to learn how to sing one day.

The phrase 'would've gotten' is correct in conditional past perfect, but the context suggests a future desire, so 'would get' might be better. Also, 'much much' is redundant; one 'much' suffices. The sentence is clearer with proper conjunction and punctuation.

× I really do want to perform for a lot of a big crowd and also I want to perform just for my family.

✓ I really do want to perform for a big crowd, and I also want to perform just for my family.

The phrase 'a lot of a big crowd' is incorrect; 'a lot of' is used with plural countable nouns or uncountable nouns, but 'crowd' is singular. 'A big crowd' is correct. Also, adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence flow.

× Of course I can.

✓ Of course I can.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.