唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現があり、より自然で効果的な英語表現に改善が必要です。例えば、"I sing song"は不自然で、"I sing songs"や"I like to sing"の方が適切です。また、理由を述べる際に論理的なつながりを示す接続詞を使うと良いでしょう。

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing. I sing songs at home every day because I love listening to music, especially K-pop, which always moves me deeply.

建議: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が分かりにくい部分があります。"how to song well"は誤りで、"how to sing well"が正しいです。また、文を簡潔にし、接続詞を使って論理的に説明すると良いでしょう。

範例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in elementary school. I took a music class once a week, and the teacher taught me how to sing well.

建議: "I want to think for my family"は意味が通じません。正しくは"I want to sing for my family"です。また、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使い、文法を正しくする必要があります。冗長な表現も避けましょう。

範例: I want to sing for my family, especially my father and mother, because they always support me when I try new things. I really appreciate their support.

建議: "singing has powerful power"は不自然な表現です。"singing has a powerful effect"などが適切です。また、文が断片的でつながりが悪いので、接続詞を使い文をつなげることが必要です。

範例: Yes, I think singing has a powerful effect. For example, when I felt sad, my grandmother sang a song for me, and I felt encouraged by it.

× Yes, I like singing very much.

✓ Yes, I like singing very much.

This sentence is correct; 'like singing' correctly uses the verb + -ing form to express enjoyment of an activity.

× Also I sing song at home every day because my hobby is listening to music such as K pop and every time I was moved singing the singing.

✓ Also, I sing songs at home every day because my hobby is listening to music such as K-pop, and every time I am moved by singing the songs.

The word 'song' should be plural 'songs' because it refers to multiple songs sung regularly. 'K pop' should be hyphenated as 'K-pop' as a proper noun. 'I was moved singing the singing' is awkward; it should be 'I am moved by singing the songs' to express a present feeling and correct preposition use.

× Yes, when I was in elementary school student I took music class once a week and in in this class teacher told me how to song well.

✓ Yes, when I was an elementary school student, I took music class once a week, and in this class, the teacher told me how to sing well.

'Elementary school student' needs an article 'an'. 'Song' is a noun; the verb form is 'sing'. 'In in' is a repetition error. 'Teacher' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific teacher.

× I want to think for my family, especially my father and mother, because when I want to try to new things, they support me every times.

✓ I want to sing for my family, especially my father and mother, because when I want to try new things, they support me every time.

'Think' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'sing'. 'Try to new things' should be 'try new things' without 'to'. 'Every times' should be singular 'every time'.

× I really appreciate that. Therefore I want to think.

✓ I really appreciate that. Therefore, I want to sing.

'Think' is incorrect here; the intended verb is 'sing' to express the desire to perform for family.

× Yes, singing has powerful power.

✓ Yes, singing has great power.

'Powerful power' is redundant; 'great power' is a more natural collocation.

× Because when I felt sad, my grandmother sang sang a song for me.

✓ Because when I felt sad, my grandmother sang a song for me.

The word 'sang' is repeated twice; the correct form is a single 'sang' as the past tense of 'sing'.

× Then I will. Encouraged by the song.

✓ Then I will be encouraged by the song.

The sentence is fragmented. 'I will' needs a verb complement; 'be encouraged' completes the passive construction properly.