唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中有语法错误和拼写错误（如'seeing'应为'singing'），表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，且内容重复。建议注意单词拼写，使用正确的时态和语法，简洁明了地表达观点，并避免重复。

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and improve my mood. For example, when I feel very sad, I sing alone in my bedroom to release negative emotions since I am shy to sing in front of others.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰，且用词不当（如'professionally thin skills'应为'professional singing skills'）。建议使用正确的词汇和语法，简洁明了地表达自己的观点，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: No, I haven't learned professional singing skills because I don't plan to be a professional singer. However, if I get the chance to perform in front of an audience, I would like to learn how to sing properly.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和拼写错误（如'seeing'应为'singing'），表达不够自然且句子结构混乱。建议简洁直接地回答问题，使用正确的语法和词汇，并避免重复和不必要的内容。

範例: I prefer to sing for myself because I am not confident about my voice and I haven't learned to sing professionally. Singing alone helps me relax without worrying about others' opinions.

建議: 回答表达了观点，但存在语法错误和用词不当（如'very happier'应为'much happier'），句子结构较为简单。建议使用更准确的词汇和语法，丰富细节，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because when people sing their favorite songs, they feel much happier. Moreover, singing helps to relax and improve negative emotions. It also strengthens bonds with friends, as singing together creates enjoyable moments.

× Actually yes, because seeing can let me be relaxed and improve my moods.

✓ Actually yes, because singing can let me be relaxed and improve my moods.

这里的动词应该用动名词形式，表示喜欢的动作。'seeing'是'看'的意思，应该改为'singing'表示'唱歌'。

× when I have very very sad I want to say in my bedroom and let the bad emotions give out

✓ when I am very very sad I want to stay in my bedroom and let the bad emotions give out

这里时态和词形错误，'have very very sad'应为'be very very sad'，'say'应为'stay'，表示待在房间。

× because I always be very shy to sing in front of others.

✓ because I am always very shy to sing in front of others.

主语是第一人称单数，谓语动词应为'am'，而不是'be'。

× Sorry, I don't learn the professionally thin skills because I don't want to be a professional singer

✓ Sorry, I haven't learned the professional singing skills because I don't want to be a professional singer

这里表达过去经历，应该用现在完成时'haven't learned'，'professionally thin skills'应为'professional singing skills'。

× so I think it's not need for myself.

✓ so I think it's not necessary for me.

'not need'用法错误，应该用形容词'necessary'，并且'for myself'改为'for me'更自然。

× if I have the chance or opportunities to sing in front of others or in front of the audience, I will actually learn about how to sing more real.

✓ if I have the chance or opportunity to sing in front of others or the audience, I will actually learn how to sing more properly.

'opportunities'改为单数'opportunity'更合适，'learn about how to sing more real'表达不自然，改为'learn how to sing more properly'。

× Sorry, I just want to sing for myself because I don't be more confident about my voice

✓ Sorry, I just want to sing for myself because I am not very confident about my voice

'don't be'用法错误，应该用'am not'表示状态。

× I don't learn how to sing very professionally, so maybe other people will laugh at me.

✓ I haven't learned how to sing very professionally, so maybe other people will laugh at me.

表达过去经历，应该用现在完成时'haven't learned'。

× And not only this, I think seeing in front of others let me always be very precious,

✓ And not only this, I think singing in front of others always makes me very nervous,

'seeing'应为'singing'，'let me always be very precious'表达错误，改为'always makes me very nervous'更符合语境。

× but if I just sing by myself, it's a good way to relax.

✓ but if I just sing by myself, it's a good way to relax.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× Actually yes, because when people sing their favorite songs, they will always be very happier.

✓ Actually yes, because when people sing their favorite songs, they always feel happier.

'will always be very happier'时态和比较级用法错误，改为一般现在时和'feel happier'更自然。

× I think not only this, singing is a good way to be relaxed and improve the bad emotions and to connect with friends very well,

✓ I think not only this, singing is a good way to relax, improve bad emotions, and connect well with friends,

'to be relaxed'应为'relax'，'improve the bad emotions'表达不自然，改为'improve bad emotions'，并且并列结构调整更流畅。

× because when people staying with their close friends, they will always have more good time.

✓ because when people stay with their close friends, they always have a better time.

'staying'应为一般现在时'stay'，'more good time'表达错误，改为'a better time'。