唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中多次出现了“seeing”这个错误单词，应该是“singing”。句子结构不够自然，表达重复且有语法错误。建议注意单词拼写，简洁表达观点，并用连词使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and improves my mood. However, I prefer to sing alone since I feel shy and nervous singing in front of others.

建議: 回答中有语法错误，如“will be learn”应为“will learn”。表达不够流畅，建议使用更自然的句型，并注意时态和语法的正确性。

範例: No, I haven't learned to sing professionally because I don't plan to be a professional singer. However, if I have the opportunity to perform in front of others, I would like to learn and improve my singing skills.

建議: 句子结构混乱，语法错误较多，如“when I don't be more confident”应为“when I am not confident”。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用连词连接观点。

範例: I prefer to sing alone because I am not confident about my voice and I am afraid others might laugh at me. Singing by myself helps me relax and enjoy without any pressure.

建議: 回答中多次出现“seeing”错误，应为“singing”。表达不够清晰，句子冗长且有语法错误。建议使用简洁句子，避免重复，并正确使用词汇。

範例: Yes, I think singing brings happiness because when people sing their favorite songs, they feel relaxed and joyful. Moreover, singing can help people make friends and connect with others.

× Actually yes, because seeing is a good way to let me relax myself and improve my mood.

✓ Actually yes, because singing is a good way to let me relax myself and improve my mood.

这里的动词应该用动名词形式表示动作，'seeing' 应改为 'singing'，因为句意是“唱歌是一种放松和改善心情的好方法”。

× But I don't want to sing in front of others, I just want to sing by myself because I always be very shy to seeing with each other and that maybe let me become more pressure.

✓ But I don't want to sing in front of others, I just want to sing by myself because I am always very shy to sing with others and that may make me feel more pressure.

动词形式错误，'be' 应该用现在时 'am'，'seeing' 应改为 'sing'，'maybe let me become more pressure' 应改为 'may make me feel more pressure'，表达更准确。

× Sorry, I don't know. I don't learn how to sing professionally because I don't want to become a professional singer, so I think I don't need to learn it.

✓ Sorry, I don't know. I haven't learned how to sing professionally because I don't want to become a professional singer, so I think I don't need to learn it.

这里描述过去经历，应该用现在完成时 'haven't learned'，而不是一般现在时 'don't learn'。

× But if I have the chance to sing in front of others or in front of the audience, I will be learn and improve my singing skills.

✓ But if I have the chance to sing in front of others or in front of the audience, I will learn and improve my singing skills.

'will be learn' 是错误的结构，正确用法是 'will learn'，因为 'will' 后接动词原形。

× Sorry, I just want to sing by myself because when I don't be more confident about my voice so maybe I will afraid of others laughed at me.

✓ Sorry, I just want to sing by myself because when I am not confident about my voice, I may be afraid that others will laugh at me.

'don't be more confident' 应改为 'am not confident'，'will afraid' 应改为 'may be afraid'，'laughed' 应改为 'will laugh'，时态和语法更准确。

× And besides, singing by myself can let me relax and sing with no pressure, so I think it's a good way to let me have a good mood of singing.

✓ And besides, singing by myself can help me relax and sing with no pressure, so I think it's a good way to help me have a good mood for singing.

'can let me relax' 更自然表达为 'can help me relax'，'have a good mood of singing' 应改为 'have a good mood for singing'。

× Yes, actually, yes, because seeing when people sing their favorite song, they will actually be very happiness and feel relaxed.

✓ Yes, actually, yes, because singing when people sing their favorite song makes them actually very happy and feel relaxed.

'seeing' 应改为 'singing'，'be very happiness' 应改为 'be very happy'，形容词用法错误。

× But not only this, you know, singing is also a good way to make friends and kinetic with friends where we're so I think it's can bring happiness to everyone.

✓ But not only this, you know, singing is also a good way to make friends and connect with friends wherever we are, so I think it can bring happiness to everyone.

'kinetic with friends where we're' 是错误表达，应改为 'connect with friends wherever we are'，语义清晰且符合习惯用法。