唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免多余的填充词。可以用更自然的表达方式，比如直接说明不喜欢唱歌的原因，并用连词连接句子，使回答更流畅。

範例: I don't like singing because my voice isn't clear, and I find it difficult to sing well. Instead, I prefer listening to others sing because I enjoy their performances more.

建議: 回答中有语法和表达不清的问题，建议用更准确的句子结构表达自己自学唱歌的经历，并且避免重复词汇。可以用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, I have taught myself to sing because our school organizes class performances. Therefore, I had to practice intensively during rehearsals.

建議: 回答表达了观点，但有些重复和语法错误。建议简洁表达，使用更自然的词汇和句式，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

範例: I prefer singing only for myself because it helps me relax and improves my mood.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整的问题，建议用完整的句子表达观点，避免重复和不必要的停顿。可以用具体例子和连接词使回答更连贯。

範例: Yes, singing can bring happiness. For example, after a long day of work, if a friend sings a beautiful song to you, it can really lift your spirits and make you feel better.

× Well, I didn't like singing.

✓ Well, I don't like singing.

The question is in present tense asking about current preference, so the verb should be in present tense 'don't like' instead of past tense 'didn't like'. Use present tense to express current feelings or habits.

× I prefer listening to the music more than singing by myself because, you know, my voice is not very clear, so it's uh, hard for me to sing very well.

✓ I prefer listening to music more than singing by myself because, you know, my voice is not very clear, so it's uh, hard for me to sing very well.

The word 'music' is an uncountable noun and generally does not require the definite article 'the' when speaking in general terms. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural.

× So I really like to listening from others.

✓ So I really like listening to others.

The phrase 'like to listening' is incorrect; it should be 'like listening'. Also, 'listening from others' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to' when referring to listening to someone.

× Yeah, of course I've learned from myself because, you know, our schools have some performance, which is singing, uh, by our class.

✓ Yeah, of course I've learned by myself because, you know, our school has some performances, which are singing, uh, by our class.

Use 'by myself' instead of 'from myself' to indicate self-learning. 'School' should be singular if referring to one school. 'Performance' should be plural 'performances' if referring to multiple events. Also, 'which is' should be 'which are' to agree with plural 'performances'.

× So I have to practice in the rehearsal so that it's very in, in intense, intense.

✓ So I have to practice during the rehearsal so that it's very intense.

The correct preposition is 'during' when referring to the time of an event. Also, 'very in, in intense, intense' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'very intense'.

× Umm, well, I don't want to, I don't want to sing for anyone, uh, just for myself because, you know, sing song is a way to satisfy ourselves, to make ourselves become more relaxable.

✓ Umm, well, I don't want to, I don't want to sing for anyone, uh, just for myself because, you know, singing is a way to satisfy ourselves, to make ourselves more relaxed.

'Sing song' is incorrect; the correct noun form is 'singing'. 'Become more relaxable' is incorrect; the adjective 'relaxable' is not commonly used; 'more relaxed' is appropriate.

× So I just want to sing for myself to make me, to make my emotion become better.

✓ So I just want to sing for myself to make me, to make my emotions better.

'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' when referring to feelings in general. 'Become better' is awkward; simply 'better' is sufficient.

× Just imagine when you're very tired or working for our for working 8 hours a day.

✓ Just imagine when you're very tired from working 8 hours a day.

The phrase 'working for our for working' is incorrect and redundant. The correct preposition is 'from' to indicate cause of tiredness.

× Then your friends sing a song to you with a very beautiful melody.

✓ Then your friends sing a song to you with a very beautiful melody.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× That's a such a great thing in the world, right?

✓ That's such a great thing in the world, right?

The phrase 'a such a' is redundant; only one article 'such a' is needed before the noun phrase.