唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some grammatical errors and unclear expressions, such as "I miss that a song" which seems incorrect. Try to use clearer and more natural phrases, and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions. Songs combine different feelings and words that can influence your mood positively whenever you listen to them.

建議: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as "I never get a chance" and "music singing." Try to use past tense correctly and more natural expressions. Also, avoid repeating "subjects" and improve sentence coherence with linking words.

範例: No, I have never had the chance to learn singing formally. Although my school offered an extra music class, my father preferred that I focus on core subjects like mathematics and history.

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by correcting grammar (e.g., "2 year old" should be "2 years old") and by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to avoid repeating "native" and add a little more detail to enrich your response.

範例: Although I am not trained in singing, I often sing to my two-year-old child to help him fall asleep. I usually sing a traditional lullaby in our native language, which he seems to enjoy.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as "effects" instead of "affects" and incomplete ideas like "because it shows some." Try to express your ideas more clearly and completely, and use linking words to connect your points logically.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it affects your mood positively. For example, singing a song for someone special can express love and strengthen your relationship, which makes both people feel happy.

× I like singing, I find it quite interesting and fascinating.

✓ I like singing because I find it quite interesting and fascinating.

The original sentence incorrectly uses a comma to connect two independent clauses, which is a comma splice. Using 'because' properly connects the clauses and clarifies the cause-effect relationship.

× Moreover, I miss that a song is a combination of different emotions, words which really can affect your mood whenever you listen.

✓ Moreover, I think that a song is a combination of different emotions and words which can really affect your mood whenever you listen.

The word 'miss' is incorrectly used here; 'think' is the appropriate verb to express opinion. Also, 'and' is needed to connect 'emotions' and 'words' properly.

× No, I never get a chance to learn about singing, but in our school they offered an extra subject relating to the music singing.

✓ No, I never got a chance to learn about singing, but in our school they offered an extra subject related to music singing.

The verb 'get' should be in the past tense 'got' to match the past context. Also, 'relating to the music singing' is awkward; 'related to music singing' is more appropriate.

× But my father always prefer to concentrate more on some important subjects such as mathematics, history and other subjects.

✓ But my father always prefers to concentrate more on some important subjects such as mathematics, history and other subjects.

The verb 'prefer' must agree with the singular subject 'my father' and be in the third person singular form 'prefers'.

× I don't have any core knowledge about the singing but I always sing a song for my child.

✓ I don't have any core knowledge about singing but I always sing songs for my child.

'The singing' is incorrect; 'singing' without 'the' is correct here. Also, 'a song' should be plural 'songs' to indicate habitual action.

× He's 2 year old and usually I sing a song to make him sleep.

✓ He's 2 years old and usually I sing a song to make him sleep.

The phrase '2 year old' should be plural '2 years old' to correctly describe age.

× It is a native song in our native language which I sing for him.

✓ It is a native song in our native language that I sing for him.

Using 'that' instead of 'which' is more appropriate for defining relative clauses in this context.

× Singing really effects your mood as if you sing a song for your special one.

✓ Singing really affects your mood, especially if you sing a song for your special one.

The verb 'effects' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'affects'. Also, 'as if' is replaced with 'especially if' for clarity.

× Definitely it expresses feeling of love which can make a good bond between you and them.

✓ Definitely, it expresses feelings of love which can create a good bond between you and them.

'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the context. Also, 'make' is better replaced with 'create' for collocation with 'bond'.

× Moreover, I might say that it brings happiness for people because it shows some.

✓ Moreover, I might say that it brings happiness to people because it shows some feelings.

The phrase 'brings happiness for people' should be 'to people'. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'feelings' completes the thought.