唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は自然ですが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現があります。例えば、「When I was high school students」は「When I was a high school student」に修正し、文を簡潔にまとめると良いでしょう。

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially with my friends. We often go to karaoke together, which is always fun.

建議: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。例えば、「I've never run UMM」は意味不明なので削除し、「I learned to sing in the school choir, but I didn't enjoy it much」と明確に表現しましょう。

範例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons, but I did sing in the school choir, although I didn't enjoy it very much.

建議: 回答は少し冗長で、文法の誤りがあります。「I want to sing just for myself」と簡潔にし、過去形の使用も正しくしましょう。

範例: I like to sing for myself, but I also enjoy singing with my friends. When I was young, we often sang together and had a great time.

建議: 回答が不完全で意味が伝わりにくいです。理由を明確に述べ、文をつなげるために接続詞を使いましょう。例えば、「I think singing together brings happiness because it helps people feel connected.」

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because singing together helps people feel connected and joyful.

× When I was high school students, we often go to karaoke.

✓ When I was a high school student, we often went to karaoke.

The phrase 'high school students' is plural, but the subject 'I' is singular, so it should be 'a high school student'. Also, 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past time frame 'When I was'.

× When I was high school students, we often go to karaoke.

✓ When I was a high school student, we often went to karaoke.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to agree with the past time expression 'When I was'.

× No, I've never run UMM, but in the school I learn to sing in the chor chor chorus but that wasn't so fun for me.

✓ No, I've never run UMM, but in school I learned to sing in the chorus, but that wasn't so fun for me.

The verb 'learn' should be in past tense 'learned' to match the past context. Also, 'chor chor chorus' seems to be a repetition error; corrected to 'chorus'.

× No, I've never run UMM, but in the school I learn to sing in the chor chor chorus but that wasn't so fun for me.

✓ No, I've never run UMM, but in school I learned to sing in the chorus, but that wasn't so fun for me.

The phrase 'the school' is better as 'school' without 'the' when referring to school in general. Also, 'chor chor chorus' is incorrect; 'chorus' is singular and correct here.

× I want to sing for just for me, but I like singing with someone else together, for example with my friends.

✓ I want to sing just for myself, but I like singing together with someone else, for example, with my friends.

The phrase 'sing for just for me' is incorrect; it should be 'sing just for myself'. Also, 'singing with someone else together' is awkward; 'singing together with someone else' is better.

× So I really enjoyed uh, singing when I was a young with my friends.

✓ So I really enjoyed singing when I was young with my friends.

The phrase 'when I was a young' is incorrect; 'young' is an adjective and does not need 'a'. Also, 'enjoyed' is correctly in past tense.

× I think singing with someone together bring happiness.

✓ I think singing together with someone brings happiness.

The verb 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'. Also, 'with someone together' is better as 'together with someone'.