唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but it lacks clarity and contains some grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific reasons. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like "I just see whatever I want to see." Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relax. For example, I often sing in the bathroom while taking a bath, which makes me feel happy and stress-free.

建議: Your answer is relevant but somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid filler words like "uh" and "oh." Also, correct grammar mistakes such as "singing lesson" should be "singing lessons."

範例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. However, from elementary school to university, I often participated in activities that required singing and performing in front of others.

建議: Your answer conveys a good idea but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily and check subject-verb agreement.

範例: If I had a great voice, I would sing for my family to show my love and appreciation. Even if my voice is not perfect, singing to someone creates a memorable and enjoyable moment for both of us.

建議: Your answer is positive but contains grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. Avoid awkward phrases like "It really be stress." Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: Absolutely, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. When listeners learn the lyrics and enjoy the melody, they can easily dance along, which helps reduce stress and improve their mood.

× Why Actually, I love singing even though I don't have a great voice, I love to see just to express myself and to make me feel relaxed and enjoy the moment.

✓ Actually, I love singing even though I don't have a great voice. I love to sing just to express myself and to make me feel relaxed and enjoy the moment.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'see' instead of 'sing'. This is a pronoun/word choice error. The correct verb here is 'sing' to match the context of the question about singing.

× I just see whatever I want to see, especially when I'm inside the bathroom and while having to take a bath It's.

✓ I just sing whatever I want to sing, especially when I'm in the bathroom and while taking a bath.

The phrase 'inside the bathroom' is better expressed as 'in the bathroom'. Also, 'having to take a bath' is awkward; 'while taking a bath' is the correct prepositional phrase. Additionally, 'see' should be 'sing' to fit the context.

× Actually, I didn't have any formal education regarding uh, singing lesson, but we always did a an activity during our elementary up to high school and even oh I was in tertiary school, we always have an activity which required us to sing and performance in.

✓ Actually, I didn't have any formal education regarding singing lessons, but we always did an activity during elementary up to high school and even when I was in tertiary school. We always had activities which required us to sing and perform.

The sentence has tense inconsistencies and article errors. 'Singing lesson' should be plural 'singing lessons'. 'Performance in' is incorrect; the verb should be 'perform'. Also, 'have' should be past tense 'had' to match the past context.

× If I may have a great voice, I may seem to my family so that I could show them my love and appreciation to them.

✓ If I had a great voice, I would sing to my family so that I could show them my love and appreciation.

The use of 'may' is incorrect here for hypothetical situations. The correct modal verbs for unreal present conditions are 'had' and 'would'. Also, 'seem to my family' is incorrect; it should be 'sing to my family'.

× When you sing to someone, even though you we don't have a nice voice, people appreciate that and enjoy that moment.

✓ When you sing to someone, even though you don't have a nice voice, people appreciate that and enjoy the moment.

The phrase 'you we' is incorrect; it should be just 'you'. Also, 'that moment' is better as 'the moment' for natural phrasing.

× It's just giving a nice memorable for both of you.

✓ It's just giving a nice memory for both of you.

'Memorable' is an adjective and cannot be used as a noun. The correct noun form here is 'memory'.

× Absolutely yes, I believe that it could bring happiness to most of the people who heard the song and by actually learning the lyrics and enjoying the tune they could easily jive on the sounds.

✓ Absolutely yes, I believe that it can bring happiness to most people who hear the song, and by actually learning the lyrics and enjoying the tune, they can easily jive to the sounds.

The tense should be present ('hear' instead of 'heard') to match the general statement. 'Could' is better as 'can' for present ability. 'Jive on the sounds' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'jive to the sounds'.

× It really be stress actually listening to a music that's why.

✓ It really relieves stress to actually listen to music; that's why.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'It really be stress' is incorrect; it should be 'It really relieves stress'. 'Listening to a music' is incorrect; 'music' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.