唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is good but try to avoid repeating the same idea twice, like saying you express yourself through singing two times. Also, use linking words to make your answer flow better. For example, you can say, "I love to sing because it has been my hobby since childhood, and it allows me to express myself creatively."

範例: I love to sing because it has been my hobby since childhood, and it allows me to express myself creatively. For instance, watching my mom sing in the church choir inspired me a lot, and I enjoy sharing my feelings through songs.

建議: Your answer has good content but it is a bit repetitive and unclear at the end. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating phrases like "I also learned." Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, "I learnt singing and guitar at a music school, and I have performed in front of large audiences."

範例: Yes, I learnt how to sing while growing up. My father enrolled me in a music school where I studied musical notes and guitar. Since then, I have performed in various places, including large music theaters, which helped me gain confidence.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and ends abruptly. Make sure to finish your sentences and avoid leaving ideas hanging. Also, try to be more specific about why you want to sing for your child and use linking words to connect your points. For example, "I want to sing for my child because music helps me express my feelings and share love."

範例: I would love to sing for my child when she grows up because music is a powerful way to express my feelings. Moreover, singing for loved ones brings me joy and helps me stay calm and happy.

建議: Your answer has good examples but ends abruptly and repeats similar ideas. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, "I believe singing brings happiness because it improves mood. For instance, my father feels joyful when he listens to his favorite songs, and my mother finds comfort in music when she is sad."

範例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it improves their mood. For example, my father becomes joyful when he listens to his favorite songs, and my mother often listens to music to feel better when she is sad.

× Certainly, I've learnt how to sing while growing up.

✓ Certainly, I learnt how to sing while growing up.

The use of present perfect 'I've learnt' is incorrect here because the action is completed in the past and the time frame 'while growing up' specifies a finished period. Simple past 'I learnt' is appropriate.

× My father registered me in a music school where I was taught a lot of notes.

✓ My father registered me in a music school where I was taught many notes.

The phrase 'a lot of' is informal and better replaced with 'many' when referring to countable nouns like 'notes' in formal speech. This is more about quantifier usage but also improves clarity.

× I learned how to play the guitar and also how to sing melodious songs following it.

✓ I learned how to play the guitar and also how to sing melodious songs after that.

The phrase 'following it' is awkward and unclear. 'After that' is a clearer way to express the sequence of learning to sing after learning guitar.

× I also learned.

✓ I also learned more.

The sentence 'I also learned.' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'more' clarifies that the learning continued.

× Well, I would love to sing for my child when she becomes an adult.

✓ Well, I would love to sing for my child when they become an adult.

Using 'she' assumes the child's gender which may not be known. Using the singular 'they' is more inclusive and grammatically acceptable.

× I'm very passionate about music and I love to sing for people that I love.

✓ I'm very passionate about music and I love to sing for people whom I love.

The relative pronoun 'that' is less appropriate when referring to people in formal contexts. 'Whom' is the correct object pronoun here.

× Also, my mom also loved to listen to music whenever she is sad.

✓ Also, my mom also loves to listen to music whenever she is sad.

The sentence mixes past tense 'loved' with present tense 'is sad'. To maintain consistency, present tense 'loves' should be used.