唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and natural but can be improved by making it more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions. For example, I often sing karaoke with my friends, which makes me feel relaxed and happy.

建議: Your answer contains useful information but is somewhat repetitive and lacks clear structure. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, try to be more specific about your experiences.

範例: Yes, I started learning singing from my teacher when I was in 8th grade. Since then, I have participated in many karaoke sessions and video events. However, I had to pause my singing practice to focus on my studies.

建議: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. The question asks about the audience you want to sing for, but you described the environment instead. Try to answer the question directly with a topic sentence and then add details if needed.

範例: I want to sing for my family and close friends because their support motivates me. Also, performing for them helps me express my emotions more freely.

建議: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing and repetition. Focus on giving a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain your ideas logically. Avoid filler words and try to use appropriate vocabulary.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people relieve stress and improve their mood. For instance, singing or listening to music often makes me feel joyful and relaxed.

× Basically I do singing with my friends in karaoke and it helps me to feel relieved.

✓ Basically I sing with my friends in karaoke and it helps me to feel relieved.

The verb 'do' is incorrectly used with the gerund 'singing'. Instead, the simple present tense verb 'sing' should be used to express habitual action.

× Yes, I have learned singing from my teacher.

✓ Yes, I have learned to sing from my teacher.

The verb 'learn' is correctly in present perfect tense, but the verb 'singing' should be in the infinitive form 'to sing' after 'learned' to indicate the action learned.

× Uh, when I was in 8th class I started learning singing and uh, after singing, after learning singing, I've done many karaokes and some videos events.

✓ Uh, when I was in 8th class I started learning to sing and, after learning singing, I've done many karaoke sessions and some video events.

The phrase 'learning singing' should be 'learning to sing' to correctly express the action. Also, 'karaokes' is incorrect plural; 'karaoke' is uncountable or 'karaoke sessions' is better. 'Videos events' should be 'video events'.

× But uh, for my studies I have to leave my passion.

✓ But uh, for my studies I have to leave my passion.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× When I'm singing, I want mic, a camera and silent background which I can easily sing and express my emotions.

✓ When I'm singing, I want a mic, a camera, and a silent background where I can easily sing and express my emotions.

The sentence lacks articles before 'mic' and 'silent background'. Also, 'which' should be replaced with 'where' to refer to the place or environment.

× Guess for according to me, singing can bring happiness in the happiness in the ma mood because singing is a part of joyful in which the person relieve the stress as well.

✓ I guess, according to me, singing can bring happiness to the mood because singing is a part of joy in which a person relieves stress as well.

The sentence has redundant and misplaced words like 'in the happiness in the ma mood'. 'Joyful' should be 'joy'. 'Relieve' should be 'relieves' to agree with singular 'person'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× The mood is changed when sing singing when the singing and uh listening any type of music.

✓ The mood changes when singing or listening to any type of music.

The phrase 'when sing singing when the singing' is incorrect and redundant. 'Mood is changed' is better as 'mood changes' in present tense. 'Listening any type of music' should be 'listening to any type of music'.