唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more fluent and clear by avoiding repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you enjoy singing, and finish with a concluding remark.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress. Moreover, I find the process of improving my singing skills very exciting. Overall, singing is a great way for me to express myself and feel happy.

建議: Avoid repeating words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be specific about your learning methods and experiences.

範例: I haven't had formal singing lessons from a teacher, but since I am interested in singing, I often watch singing tutorials on the Internet and learn from YouTube videos. This self-study has helped me improve gradually.

建議: Try to avoid repetition and grammatical mistakes. Use clear and correct pronouns and structure your answer logically. Start with a direct answer, then explain your reason with linking words.

範例: If I had a girlfriend, I would love to sing a song for her because it would be a special way to express my love and feelings. Singing for someone you care about can make the moment very meaningful.

建議: Improve fluency by avoiding repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to explain your ideas clearly and provide specific examples to support your opinion.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows us to share emotions. For instance, at parties, when someone sings, it creates a joyful atmosphere that makes everyone feel happy.

× I really like singing because when I when I am seeing, I feel I think myself are relaxing and I can release a lot of pressure and I enjoy singing and improving and improve my skill.

✓ I really like singing because when I am singing, I feel relaxed and I can release a lot of pressure. I enjoy singing and improving my skills.

The phrase 'when I am seeing' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'singing' to match the context. 'I think myself are relaxing' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'I feel relaxed' to express the state properly. Also, 'improving and improve my skill' is redundant and inconsistent; it should be 'improving my skills' for clarity and correctness.

× I I don't have the experience of learning learning singing by teacher, but because I have interested in singing so I often I often search search the singing lessons on Internet or learning from YouTube.

✓ I don't have the experience of learning singing from a teacher, but because I am interested in singing, I often search for singing lessons on the Internet or learn from YouTube.

The phrase 'have interested' is incorrect; the correct form is 'am interested' to express current interest. 'Learning learning singing by teacher' is awkward and incorrect; it should be 'learning singing from a teacher'. Also, 'search search' is repeated and 'search the singing lessons' should be 'search for singing lessons'. 'Learning from YouTube' is better as 'learn from YouTube' to maintain parallel structure.

× If I if I have a girlfriend, I want to sing, sing, sing, sing, sing for her song because I think I really love him and I want to express my love.

✓ If I have a girlfriend, I want to sing a song for her because I really love her and I want to express my love.

The pronoun 'him' is incorrect when referring to a girlfriend; it should be 'her'. The repetition of 'sing' is unnecessary and should be removed. Also, 'sing for her song' is awkward; 'sing a song for her' is clearer.

× So I think if I really have a girlfriend I will sing a song for her and express my emotion.

✓ So I think if I have a girlfriend, I will sing a song for her and express my emotions.

The phrase 'if I really have' is better as 'if I have' for naturalness. 'Express my emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to reflect the variety of feelings expressed.

× Yeah, I, I agree because when someone someone is seeing and I can, I can accept their, their emotion and especially when we are in a party or something and when there are somebody singing and I will be very happy.

✓ Yeah, I agree because when someone is singing, I can accept their emotions, especially when we are at a party or something and there is somebody singing, I feel very happy.

The phrase 'someone someone is seeing' should be 'someone is singing'. 'Accept their, their emotion' should be 'accept their emotions' for correct plural and no repetition. 'In a party' should be 'at a party'. 'When there are somebody singing' is incorrect; it should be 'there is somebody singing'. 'I will be very happy' is better as 'I feel very happy' to express current feeling.