唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và thể hiện cảm xúc cá nhân, tuy nhiên câu trả lời hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me relax and forget my worries. Also, I enjoy improving my voice through regular practice.

建議: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp nhưng câu trả lời thiếu sự mạch lạc và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Nên sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và sửa lỗi thì để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn.

範例: I have never taken formal singing lessons, but as a child, I listened to many pop songs and practiced singing by myself.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lỗi sai về thì và cấu trúc câu.

範例: I usually don't sing for anyone in particular, but as a member of my music club, I often perform in front of an audience.

建議: Bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng câu trả lời dài và có lỗi ngữ pháp, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Nên chia câu thành các phần ngắn hơn, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I believe singing brings happiness because music allows people to immerse themselves and forget their worries. Also, singing helps express emotions in the moment.

× I do love singing because personally when I sing I feel like myself immersed in the vibe of music and I will forget all about the sad things and additionally I feel that I'm a good singer so I want to improve my voice by practice singing.

✓ I do love singing because personally when I sing I feel myself immersed in the vibe of music and I forget all about the sad things. Additionally, I feel that I'm a good singer so I want to improve my voice by practicing singing.

The phrase 'by practice singing' is incorrect because after 'by' we need the gerund form of the verb, which is 'practicing'. Also, 'I will forget' should be 'I forget' to match the present tense context. Using the gerund after 'by' is a common grammatical rule in English.

× I never learned how to sing but when I was a little child I used to listen to a lot of music especially pop songs.

✓ I have never learned how to sing but when I was a little child I used to listen to a lot of music especially pop songs.

The present perfect tense 'have never learned' is more appropriate here to indicate an experience up to now. 'Never learned' in simple past suggests a finished time, but since the speaker is talking about their life experience, present perfect is better.

× So I get used to the notes and I start practicing myself.

✓ So I got used to the notes and I started practicing by myself.

Since the context is in the past ('when I was a little child'), the verbs should be in past tense: 'got used' and 'started'. Also, 'practicing myself' is incorrect; it should be 'practicing by myself' to indicate doing it alone.

× But if mention any professional course though I never.

✓ But if I mention any professional course, I never took one.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'I' and 'took one' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Personally, I don't want to sing for anyone but growing up until now I've been performs performed to a lot of people, especially when I'm quite an active member of my music club and I also need to perform a lot so it can't become my.

✓ Personally, I don't want to sing for anyone but growing up until now I've performed for a lot of people, especially when I was quite an active member of my music club and I also needed to perform a lot so it could become mine.

The phrase 'I've been performs performed' is incorrect; it should be 'I've performed'. Also, 'I'm' should be 'I was' to match past context. 'Need' should be 'needed' for past tense. 'It can't become my' is incomplete; 'mine' is the correct possessive pronoun.

× Personally I think singing can bring happiness to people because music in general is a tools where you can immerse yourself in and vive with the music and forget all about the sad thoughts and singing is somehow you can express your feeling and feeling emotional at the moment you sing.

✓ Personally, I think singing can bring happiness to people because music in general is a tool where you can immerse yourself and live with the music and forget all about sad thoughts. Singing is also a way you can express your feelings and emotions at the moment you sing.

'Music is a tools' is incorrect because 'tools' is plural; it should be 'a tool'. 'Vive' is a typo and should be 'live'. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' and 'feeling emotional' should be 'emotions' to correctly express the idea.