唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Жауабыңыз табиғи және түсінікті, бірақ сөйлемдеріңізді қысқарту және байланыстыру сөздерін қолдану арқылы жауапты тиімдірек етуге болады. Мысалы, "I have enjoyed singing since childhood because I often sang at family events such as my grandparents' birthdays and relatives' weddings. Even now, I enjoy singing karaoke whenever I have time."

範例: I have enjoyed singing since childhood because I often sang at family events such as my grandparents' birthdays and relatives' weddings. Even now, I enjoy singing karaoke whenever I have time.

建議: Жауабыңызда грамматикалық қателер бар және сөйлемдер ұзақ әрі күрделі. Қарапайым және нақты сөйлемдер құрып, байланыстыру сөздерін қолданыңыз. Мысалы, "No, I have never learned how to sing formally. However, I believe I have a natural talent and I always sing confidently, even without formal training."

範例: No, I have never learned how to sing formally. However, I believe I have a natural talent and I always sing confidently, even without formal training.

建議: Жауабыңызда кейбір сөздердің дұрыс жазылмауы және сөйлем құрылымының дұрыс еместігі байқалады. Жауабыңызды қысқартуға және нақтылауға тырысыңыз. Мысалы, "I don't have a specific person to sing for, but in the future, I hope to perform at a concert for my favorite artist, even though it might seem impossible."

範例: I don't have a specific person to sing for, but in the future, I hope to perform at a concert for my favorite artist, even though it might seem impossible.

建議: Жауабыңыз жақсы, бірақ кейбір сөйлемдерді байланыстыру сөздері арқылы жақсартуға болады. Мысалы, "Definitely, I believe singing brings happiness to people because many find joy in it. Moreover, artists often say in interviews that music saved their lives and helped them express their emotions."

範例: Definitely, I believe singing brings happiness to people because many find joy in it. Moreover, artists often say in interviews that music saved their lives and helped them express their emotions.

× From my early childhood I used to sing on different events, on my grandparents birthdays, at my relatives weddings and even now the karaoke I always enjoy and have time to.

✓ From my early childhood, I used to sing at different events, on my grandparents' birthdays, at my relatives' weddings, and even now at karaoke, I always enjoy and make time for it.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'different events' and 'grandparents birthdays'; the correct preposition is 'at' for events and occasions. Also, possessive apostrophes are missing in 'grandparents birthdays' and 'relatives weddings'. Additionally, 'the karaoke' should be 'at karaoke' to indicate the activity. The phrase 'have time to' is incomplete and should be 'make time for it' to be grammatically correct.

× No, unfortunately I haven't taught how to sing but I believe I have a talent and even without studying how to properly sing, I do not have insecurities about my voice and I always sing confident in every place.

✓ No, unfortunately I haven't been taught how to sing, but I believe I have a talent and even without studying how to properly sing, I do not have insecurities about my voice and I always sing confidently everywhere.

The verb 'taught' is incorrectly used; the correct passive form is 'been taught'. Also, 'sing confident' is incorrect; the adverb 'confidently' should be used to modify the verb 'sing'. 'In every place' is awkward; 'everywhere' is more natural.

× I do not have a specific person that I would like to sing for, but probably in the future I would like to go to a concert and sing there for my favorite artist, even if it sounds really unpossible.

✓ I do not have a specific person that I would like to sing for, but probably in the future I would like to go to a concert and sing there for my favorite artist, even if it sounds really impossible.

The word 'unpossible' is not a correct English word; the correct word is 'impossible'. This is a vocabulary error related to quantifiers and modifiers.

× Lots of people found their happiness while singing, and most of the artists say in their interviews that music saved their lives and helped them to express their feelings, emotions.

✓ Lots of people have found their happiness while singing, and most artists say in their interviews that music has saved their lives and helped them to express their feelings and emotions.

The verb tense is corrected to present perfect 'have found' to indicate experience up to now. Also, 'most of the artists' is better as 'most artists' for naturalness. The phrase 'feelings, emotions' is redundant; 'feelings and emotions' is clearer. The verb agreement and article usage are improved for clarity.