唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'can makes' và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I really love singing because it helps me relax and unwind after a busy day. For example, I often go to karaoke with my friends, and singing together always lifts my mood and makes me feel better.

建議: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời rõ ràng và chính xác hơn. Ví dụ, 'had scratched me to a class' không đúng, nên dùng 'enrolled me in a singing class'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như thì động từ.

範例: I remember when I was a kid, my mother enrolled me in a singing class to improve my skills. However, I didn't see much progress, so I stopped attending and haven't joined any singing classes since then.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý nghĩa nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để tự nhiên hơn. Hãy chú ý cách dùng thì và cấu trúc câu, tránh lặp từ và dùng từ phù hợp hơn như 'appreciated' thay vì 'appreciate'.

範例: I want to sing for everyone because music has the power to brighten people's days. Singing is a way to show appreciation, and it makes me happy to bring joy to others.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ, 'you can have a power' nên là 'singing has the power'. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời logic và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

範例: I believe singing has the power to bring joy to people around the world. Not only the melody but also the lyrics can touch people's feelings. I really want to sing for others to bring warmth and a positive atmosphere.

× I really love singing because singing can makes me feel relaxed and unwind my mind after a busy day.

✓ I really love singing because singing can make me feel relaxed and unwind my mind after a busy day.

The modal verb 'can' should be followed by the base form of the verb without 's'. 'Makes' is incorrect after 'can'; it should be 'make'.

× I'm usually asking my friend to go to the karaoke when we have time and when singing together always left me a mood and make me feel better after a day.

✓ I usually ask my friend to go to karaoke when we have time, and singing together always leaves me in a good mood and makes me feel better after a day.

The present simple tense is used for habitual actions, so 'I'm usually asking' should be 'I usually ask'. Also, 'left' is past tense but the sentence refers to habitual action, so it should be 'leaves'. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'singing together'. 'A mood' is incorrect; it should be 'in a good mood'.

× I remembered when I was a kid, my mother had scratched me to a class which helped me to improve my singing skills.

✓ I remember when I was a kid, my mother took me to a class which helped me improve my singing skills.

'Remembered' is past tense but the sentence refers to a present memory, so 'remember' is better. 'Had scratched me to a class' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'took me to a class'. 'Helped me to improve' can be simplified to 'helped me improve'.

× However, during the class I didn't see any much progress so that I kept up and since then I haven't register in any singing classes again.

✓ However, during the class I didn't see much progress, so I kept going, and since then I haven't registered in any singing classes again.

'Any much progress' is incorrect; it should be 'much progress'. 'Kept up' is incomplete; 'kept going' or 'kept it up' is better. 'Haven't register' should be 'haven't registered' to use the past participle after 'have'.

× I want to sing to everyone because I know that music has the power to brighten up someone days and I'm really want to bring them the song cause singing is a way to show the appreciation to others so that it can make me make them feel appreciate as well as joy and happy.

✓ I want to sing for everyone because I know that music has the power to brighten up someone's day, and I really want to bring them songs because singing is a way to show appreciation to others so that it can make me and them feel appreciated as well as joyful and happy.

The correct preposition is 'sing for' not 'sing to'. 'Someone days' should be 'someone's day'. 'I'm really want' is incorrect; it should be 'I really want'. 'Cause' should be 'because'. 'Make them feel appreciate' should be 'make them feel appreciated'. 'Joy and happy' should be 'joyful and happy'.

× As I mentioned, I feel that you can have a power to bring joyfulness to anyone in the world.

✓ As I mentioned, I feel that you can have the power to bring joy to anyone in the world.

'A power' is incorrect; it should be 'the power'. 'Joyfulness' is less common; 'joy' is better. The sentence is general, so 'you' is acceptable but could be 'one' for formality.

× Not only becomes a bit melody, but the lyrics can also touch everyone feelings and I'm really want to sing to other people to bring them warmth and positive environment.

✓ Not only is it a bit of a melody, but the lyrics can also touch everyone's feelings, and I really want to sing to other people to bring them warmth and a positive environment.

'Not only becomes a bit melody' is incorrect; it should be 'Not only is it a bit of a melody'. 'Everyone feelings' should be 'everyone's feelings'. 'I'm really want' should be 'I really want'. 'Positive environment' needs an article 'a' before it.