唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，并且注意单词拼写和搭配。可以用更自然的表达方式说明喜欢唱歌的原因。

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me release negative emotions and makes me feel happy. Also, singing can help me make new friends since many people enjoy it.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“staying”应为“singing”，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的词汇，简洁明了地说明学习唱歌的经历。

範例: Yes, I have learned how to sing with my best friend. She is very good at singing, so I learned how to control the pitch and pronounce the words correctly.

建議: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简化句子，避免重复表达，并且更自然地说明唱歌的对象和原因。

範例: I want to sing for myself because I study hard for my health exam, and singing helps me relax and release stress.

建議: 回答表达混乱，语法和词汇错误较多，建议用简单明了的句子表达观点，避免不相关或错误的内容。

範例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people. It helps reduce stress and makes people feel relaxed and joyful.

× Well, I really like singing because singing is a good way for us to release as our negative emotions, and it's also a way for us to.

✓ Well, I really like singing because singing is a good way for us to release our negative emotions, and it's also a way for us to.

这里的错误是多余的介词“as”，导致句子结构不正确。应去掉“as”使句子通顺。

× New friends, as almost everyone likes seeing.

✓ Make new friends, as almost everyone likes singing.

原句中“seeing”应为“singing”，且缺少动词“make”，导致句子不完整。应补充动词并改正拼写错误。

× She is really good at staying so I have learned how to control the tune and how to make the true pronunciation in the scene as well.

✓ She is really good at singing so I have learned how to control the tune and how to make the true pronunciation in the scene as well.

“staying”应为“singing”，因为表达的是“擅长唱歌”，这里需要动名词形式。

× I just want to sing for myself as I really study hard for my health examination and I really want to sing a song for myself to make me make myself relax and help release my bad emotions.

✓ I just want to sing for myself as I am really studying hard for my health examination and I really want to sing a song for myself to help me relax and release my bad emotions.

“study”应改为进行时“am studying”，表示正在进行的动作；“make me make myself relax”表达重复且不自然，应简化为“help me relax”。

× Yes, definitely, not only for human seeing but also the animal thing like bird tripping can really release people's stress and make people feel relax.

✓ Yes, definitely, not only for human singing but also for animals like birds tripping can really release people's stress and make people feel relaxed.

“human seeing”应为“human singing”，“animal thing”表达不准确，应改为“animals”；“make people feel relax”中“relax”应为形容词“relaxed”。

× Thing can bring happiness for people, not for not only for its.

✓ These things can bring happiness to people, not only for themselves.

“Thing”应为复数“These things”；“not for not only for its”结构混乱，应改为“not only for themselves”以表达正确意思。