唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of saying "singing is the only way that I can," clarify what you mean. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and feel energetic. It's my favourite leisure activity, so I often sing whenever I have free time.

建議: Your answer repeats ideas and has some grammatical errors. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid repeating the same points and improve sentence clarity.

範例: Yes, I learned singing as a subject when I was in school. Since then, I have enjoyed singing during my free time, whether I'm in the bathroom, park, or my room.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and has some grammatical mistakes. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy.

範例: I usually sing for myself because it helps me relax and feel happy. However, in the future, I hope to improve my skills and maybe perform for others.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and unclear in places. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Avoid filler words and focus on providing specific reasons or examples.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and enjoy themselves. Many listen to songs to improve their mood and feel more positive.

× Yes, I like to do singing because singing is the only way that I can.

✓ Yes, I like singing because singing is the only way that I can.

The phrase 'like to do singing' is incorrect because 'singing' is a gerund and does not require 'to do'. The correct form is 'like singing'.

× I can relax my mind and I always feel energetic whenever I sing and it's my leisure time activity, so I always like to sing.

✓ I can relax my mind and I always feel energetic whenever I sing. It's my leisure time activity, so I always like to sing.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence. Splitting it into two sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, when I was a child in in school, I had a subject of singing.

✓ Yes, when I was a child in school, I had a subject called singing.

The phrase 'a subject of singing' is awkward. The correct expression is 'a subject called singing'. Also, the repeated 'in' is a typographical error.

× Moreover, it's my leisure time activity, so I always enjoy singing.

✓ Moreover, it's my leisure time activity, so I always enjoy singing.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present tense context.

× So whenever I get a chance to sing, I always sing if it's in the bathroom, if it's in the park, in the room.

✓ So whenever I get a chance to sing, I always sing, whether it's in the bathroom, the park, or the room.

The original sentence is awkward and lacks parallel structure. Using 'whether...or...' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So I always like to sing and I learned it a lot.

✓ So I always like to sing and I have learned a lot.

The phrase 'I learned it a lot' is incorrect. The correct form is 'I have learned a lot' to indicate experience up to now.

× Well, there is not a particular choice that I want to sing for but it's my leisure time activity.

✓ Well, there is no particular person I want to sing for, but it's my leisure time activity.

The phrase 'there is not a particular choice that I want to sing for' is awkward. 'There is no particular person I want to sing for' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× So I always like to sing for myself to make me a relaxed and happy.

✓ So I always like to sing for myself to make me relaxed and happy.

The article 'a' before 'relaxed and happy' is incorrect because these are adjectives describing a state, not countable nouns.

× Moreover, it's my hobby to sing and I love to learn about it and in future if I will get chance I will learn about it more.

✓ Moreover, it's my hobby to sing and I love to learn about it, and in the future, if I get a chance, I will learn more about it.

The phrase 'if I will get chance' is incorrect; in conditional sentences, the present tense is used after 'if'. Also, 'in future' should be 'in the future'.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it's a leisure time activity, because some of the people they they listen it just.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it's a leisure time activity, and some people just listen to it.

The phrase 'some of the people they they listen it just' is incorrect. 'They' is redundant, and 'listen it' should be 'listen to it'.

× Listen it because they want to make themselves relaxed and happy.

✓ They listen to it because they want to make themselves relaxed and happy.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Also, the sentence was missing a subject, which is added here for clarity.

× So I think people can bring, uh, singing and bring happiness for the people.

✓ So I think singing can bring happiness to people.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Simplifying it to 'singing can bring happiness to people' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.