唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "I do like" and "I or a good singer." Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, you can say, "Yes, I like singing because it relaxes me. Although I'm not a professional singer, I enjoy singing alone, especially in the bathroom."

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax. Although I'm not a professional, I often sing alone, especially in the bathroom, where I feel comfortable expressing myself.

建議: Your answer provides relevant details but can be structured better. Use linking words like "however" or "but" to connect ideas. Also, avoid filler words like "uh." For example, "No, I have never formally learned singing. However, during school, I learned to play the tabla, which I was passionate about. In 5th grade, my teacher encouraged me to sing in front of the class because I sang well."

範例: No, I have never formally learned singing. However, during school, I learned to play the tabla, which I was passionate about. In 5th grade, my teacher encouraged me to sing in front of the class because I sang well.

建議: Your answer is understandable but can be more natural and clear. Avoid awkward phrases like "I praise myself with singing." Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "I prefer singing for myself rather than for others because it makes me feel happy. I especially enjoy singing romantic songs that boost my confidence and make me feel beautiful."

範例: I prefer singing for myself rather than for others because it makes me feel happy. I especially enjoy singing romantic songs that boost my confidence and make me feel beautiful.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and coherence. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to organize your thoughts. For example, "Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. For instance, many people enjoy live orchestra performances in restaurants and hotels because good music helps them relax and feel joyful."

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. For instance, many people enjoy live orchestra performances in restaurants and hotels because good music helps them relax and feel joyful.

× I'm not a stage performer or I or a good singer.

✓ I'm not a stage performer or a good singer.

The phrase 'or I or a good singer' is incorrect due to the unnecessary repetition and incorrect pronoun usage. The correct form is 'or a good singer' to maintain parallel structure and clarity.

× So whenever I like any song, I used to sing it, uh, when I'm alone.

✓ So whenever I like any song, I sing it when I'm alone.

The phrase 'used to sing' implies a past habitual action, which conflicts with 'whenever I like any song' indicating present habit. The correct tense is simple present 'I sing' to match the habitual action in the present.

× No, I never got a chance to learn music or singing, but at the school time, uh, I can remember that I have learned tabla, which was a passion for, uh, that time for me.

✓ No, I never got a chance to learn music or singing, but during school time, I remember that I learned tabla, which was a passion for me at that time.

The phrase 'I have learned' is present perfect, which is not appropriate with the specific past time 'at the school time'. The simple past 'I learned' is correct here. Also, 'at the school time' is better expressed as 'during school time'.

× my teacher asked me to come in front and sing some songs.

✓ my teacher asked me to come forward and sing some songs.

The phrase 'come in front' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'come forward' to indicate moving ahead or stepping up.

× I praise myself, uh, with singing, I love so many uh, romantic songs or the songs which feels make me feel great or make me attractive, beautiful.

✓ I praise myself through singing. I love many romantic songs or songs that make me feel great or make me feel attractive and beautiful.

The original sentence has pronoun misuse and awkward phrasing. 'I praise myself with singing' is better as 'I praise myself through singing'. Also, 'which feels make me feel' is incorrect; it should be 'that make me feel'. The adjectives 'attractive' and 'beautiful' need 'feel' before them for clarity.

× Yes, listening music or singing.

✓ Yes, listening to music or singing.

The verb 'listening' requires the preposition 'to' before its object. Hence, 'listening music' should be 'listening to music'.

× like we can see a orchestra in so many restaurants and hotels or some stage performances to Defi.

✓ like we can see an orchestra in many restaurants and hotels or some stage performances to Defi.

The article 'a' before a vowel sound word 'orchestra' should be 'an'. Also, 'so many restaurants' is acceptable but 'many restaurants' is more natural here. The phrase 'stage performances to Defi' is unclear but kept as is due to lack of context.

× while listening music, listening, uh, somebody's thinking.

✓ while listening to music, listening to somebody's singing.

Again, 'listening music' should be 'listening to music'. The phrase 'somebody's thinking' is likely a mishearing or misstatement; 'somebody's singing' fits contextually.