唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm but contains several language errors and redundancies. Try to use the correct verb 'sing' instead of 'saying', and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, organise your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing very much. I was a member of my school choir for three years, which helped me improve my skills. Additionally, I often sing while showering or doing my homework because it relaxes me and makes me happy.

建議: Your answer is relevant and informative but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and try to be more concise while maintaining clarity.

範例: Yes, I have. I was part of my school choir for three years, where my teacher taught us proper singing techniques. Moreover, I took additional music lessons both at school and outside, so I have been learning to sing professionally since childhood.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but contains some unclear expressions and grammar mistakes. Use the correct verb 'sing' instead of 'send', and clarify your ideas with better vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, try to link your ideas smoothly.

範例: I don't have a specific person in mind, but I would love to sing for my parents and family to impress them. Additionally, I enjoy singing for myself because many song lyrics help me express my feelings and understand myself better.

建議: Your answer is thoughtful but contains hesitations and some language errors. Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and use more precise vocabulary. Also, organise your answer clearly with linking words to show contrast and elaboration.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, songs with happy lyrics can uplift someone's mood, while sad songs might evoke feelings of sadness. Therefore, singing can express a wide range of emotions, not just happiness.

× I do like saying I am.

✓ I do like singing.

The student incorrectly used 'saying' instead of 'singing'. 'Saying' refers to speaking words, while 'singing' is the correct verb for producing musical sounds with the voice. The verb 'like' is followed by the gerund form of the verb, so 'singing' is appropriate here.

× I also like saying during showering and actually doing my prep.

✓ I also like singing during showering and actually doing my prep.

Again, 'saying' is incorrectly used instead of 'singing'. The student means to express enjoyment of singing while showering and preparing, so 'singing' is the correct gerund form to use after 'like'.

× and it's it feels happy when I sing.

✓ and it feels happy when I sing.

The phrase 'it's it feels happy' is redundant and incorrect. The correct structure is 'it feels happy' or better yet 'it makes me feel happy'. The student should remove the extra 'it's' to correct the sentence.

× I did.

✓ Yes, I did.

The answer 'I did.' is a fragment and sounds incomplete. Adding 'Yes,' makes it a complete and natural response to the question about past experience.

× I did. I attended my school choir for three years during my middle school and my teacher taught us how to sing properly and also I took lots of music lessons during school and outside of school, so I know how to sing professionally since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did. I attended my school choir for three years during middle school, and my teacher taught us how to sing properly. I also took lots of music lessons during and outside of school, so I have known how to sing professionally since I was a child.

The original sentence is a run-on and has tense inconsistency. 'Since I was a child' requires present perfect tense 'have known' to indicate an action continuing from the past to present. Also, splitting into shorter sentences improves clarity.

× I don't have a particular person that I want to sing for, but I would love to sing for my parents or my family to really impress them.

✓ I don't have a particular person I want to sing for, but I would love to sing for my parents or my family to really impress them.

The relative pronoun 'that' is unnecessary here and can be omitted for smoother, more natural English.

× And also I want to send for myself because I think lots of the lyrics and the song itself can't express myself and I will know myself more.

✓ And also I want to sing for myself because I think lots of the lyrics and the song itself can't express myself, and I will know myself better.

The student wrote 'send' instead of 'sing', which is a vocabulary error. Also, 'know myself more' is better expressed as 'know myself better'. The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is correctly used here.

× I do think UMM saying can bring some happiness to some people.

✓ I do think UMM singing can bring some happiness to some people.

'Saying' is incorrectly used instead of 'singing'. The student is referring to the act of singing bringing happiness, so 'singing' is the correct gerund form.

× UMM for example happy lyrics can bring definitely happens to people.

✓ UMM, for example, happy lyrics can definitely bring happiness to people.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. The corrected sentence places commas appropriately and corrects word order to make the meaning clear.

× UMM on the other hand, UMM sad lyrics can bring sadness to people.

✓ UMM, on the other hand, sad lyrics can bring sadness to people.

Commas are needed to set off the phrase 'on the other hand' for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× So I think singing can bring all kinds of emotions to people, not only UMM happiness.

✓ So I think singing can bring all kinds of emotions to people, not only happiness.

The filler 'UMM' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow. Removing it improves clarity and formality.