唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide clearer examples.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me refresh my mind and improve my mood. For instance, after a bad test, I often go to karaoke and sing songs, which helps me start a new day feeling positive.

建議: Your response is relevant but contains unclear phrases and some grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your reasons logically.

範例: No, I haven't learned how to sing properly yet, but I want to in the future because I'm not satisfied with my voice quality. Also, I find it difficult to control my pitch, so I would like to train to improve it.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but has some awkward phrasing and hesitations. Try to avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to explain your reasons more coherently.

範例: I want to sing for my friends because it helps us bond. However, I feel a bit embarrassed to sing in front of my family. Moreover, I believe singing is a great way to get closer to my friends.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains many hesitations and unclear references. Try to avoid filler words and provide specific, clear examples. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because music has a powerful effect on emotions. For example, many people have shared stories online about how certain songs changed their lives and made them feel happier.

× Why sang some songs I can refresh my mind and I can start new and new and favorable mood.

✓ Singing some songs helps me refresh my mind and start a new and favorable mood.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'sang' (past tense) where the gerund 'singing' is appropriate to express a habitual action. Also, the sentence structure is unclear and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× For example when I get bad squad test, I went to karaoke and sing some songs, then I can start a new day.

✓ For example, when I get a bad squad test result, I go to karaoke and sing some songs, then I can start a new day.

The sentence mixes past tense 'went' with present tense 'get' and 'can start'. Consistency in tense is needed. 'Went' should be 'go' to match the habitual action, and 'sing' is correct as base form after 'and'.

× No, I haven't learned how to sing better yet, but I want to learn it one day.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing well yet, but I want to learn one day.

The phrase 'sing better' is awkward here; 'sing well' is the correct adverbial form. Also, 'learn it' is unnecessary; 'learn' suffices.

× And this is because I I'm not satisfied with my voice texture and I don't think I can con.

✓ And this is because I'm not satisfied with my voice texture and I don't think I can control it.

The sentence has a repeated pronoun 'I I'm' and an incomplete verb 'con' which should be 'control it' to complete the meaning.

× I can control my pitch for now and therefore I want to train it.

✓ I cannot control my pitch yet, so I want to train it.

The original sentence contradicts itself by saying 'I can control' but then wants to train it. The intended meaning is likely inability to control pitch, so 'cannot' is appropriate.

× I want to sing for my friend or another, however, I Can't Sing for my family because a bit embarrassing for me uh.

✓ I want to sing for my friends or others; however, I can't sing for my family because it is a bit embarrassing for me.

'Friend or another' is incorrect; 'friends or others' is better. 'Can't Sing' should be lowercase 'can't sing'. Also, 'a bit embarrassing for me' needs 'it is' for grammatical correctness.

× Furthermore, I think umm singing is one of the best way to get along with all my friends more.

✓ Furthermore, I think singing is one of the best ways to get along better with all my friends.

'Best way' should be plural 'best ways' to agree with 'one of the'. 'Get along with all my friends more' is awkward; 'get along better with all my friends' is clearer.

× I think song has the power to make people happy.

✓ I think songs have the power to make people happy.

'Song' should be plural 'songs' to generalize the statement. Therefore, the verb changes from 'has' to 'have' to agree with the plural subject.

× For example, uh, in the future, some people write down the comments that uh, the song changed their life and they are happy now.

✓ For example, some people have written comments that the song changed their lives and they are happy now.

'In the future' is incorrect here because the comments already exist. Present perfect 'have written' is appropriate to indicate past actions with present relevance. Also, 'life' should be plural 'lives'.

× Uh, in some videos and uh, it demonstrates that uh, songs can make people happy.

✓ In some videos, it is demonstrated that songs can make people happy.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Using passive voice 'it is demonstrated' clarifies the meaning. Also, removing filler words improves clarity.