唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is natural and shows your feelings, but it is a bit unclear and incomplete. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid filler words like 'umm', and complete your thoughts within 5 sentences. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. Although I haven't sung professionally due to my limited vocal skills, I still find pleasure in singing along to my favourite songs.

建議: Your answer is relevant and natural, but try to avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, provide a bit more specific detail about your experience with singing to enrich your response.

範例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. However, I often sing casually in the bathroom and with my friends, even though they sometimes tease me about my tone. Despite that, singing helps me feel calm and happy.

建議: Your answer shows your feelings but is a bit unclear and incomplete. Try to give a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, use more natural expressions instead of phrases like 'a blossom of joy'.

範例: I would like to sing for my parents because they always support and encourage me in everything I do. Singing for them would make me very happy and strengthen our bond.

建議: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but try to avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, be careful with grammar, for example, use 'soothing music' without 'a'.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because soothing music helps people relax and reduce stress. Personally, singing along to my favourite songs always lifts my mood and makes me feel joyful.

× Absolutely, I love singing but though I haven't tried it professionally because umm I think personally I have a little bad tone so.

✓ Absolutely, I love singing, but I haven't tried it professionally because I think I have a slightly bad tone.

The original sentence has redundant conjunctions 'but though' and filler words like 'umm' which make the sentence awkward. Also, 'a little bad tone' is better expressed as 'a slightly bad tone'. Simplifying the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× But I love enjoying the music and.

✓ But I love enjoying the music.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' without completing the thought, which is a sentence structure error. Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly.

× I would love to sing to my parents because they really appreciate and engage me in whatever sort of activity I do and it's absolutely happy.

✓ I would love to sing for my parents because they really appreciate and support me in whatever sort of activity I do, and it makes me absolutely happy.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect when expressing performing for someone; 'for' is appropriate. Also, 'engage me in' is better replaced with 'support me in' for clarity. The phrase 'it's absolutely happy' is incorrect; it should be 'it makes me absolutely happy' to express the feeling properly.

× It brings me a blossom of joy and happiness for singing and and.

✓ It brings me a blossoming joy and happiness from singing.

The phrase 'a blossom of joy' is not idiomatic; 'a blossoming joy' or 'a burst of joy' is better. Also, the sentence ends with repeated 'and and' which is incorrect. The corrected sentence is concise and grammatically correct.