唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally good but try to avoid informal contractions like 'cause' and use more formal linking words such as 'because'. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas more smoothly. For example, you can say how playing an instrument helps your singing in one sentence. Try to keep your sentences clear and concise.

範例: Yes, I have loved singing since my childhood because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. Additionally, playing a musical instrument has helped me improve my singing skills. In fact, my whole family enjoys singing, and my sister is a very talented singer.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to connect ideas. Also, avoid informal contractions and check your sentence structure carefully.

範例: Actually, I have not had many opportunities to learn singing because I am very busy with my studies. However, my sister had a singing teacher when she was seven years old, and I used to listen to their lessons.

建議: Your answer has some good ideas but needs clearer sentence structure and better vocabulary. Avoid informal phrases like 'for my own cause' and use 'because' or 'as'. Also, clarify 'special for persons' to 'special people'. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Basically, I love to sing for myself because singing is a part of my life that allows me to express my feelings to others. Additionally, I enjoy singing with my friends and special people in my life.

建議: Your answer is a bit confusing and repetitive. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repeating words like 'multiple'. Use linking words such as 'and' or 'however' to connect your points. Also, explain your ideas with specific examples or reasons.

範例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to many people because it allows them to express their feelings. However, singing can also express sadness or other emotions, showing the variety of feelings that music can convey.

× Actually, I don't have enough option to learn singing 'cause I very I'm very much busy with my carnival study.

✓ Actually, I don't have enough options to learn singing because I am very busy with my carnival study.

The word 'option' should be plural 'options' to match the context (Grammar problem type ID: 1). Also, 'I very I'm very much busy' is incorrect; it should be 'I am very busy' to correctly use the present tense and proper verb form (Grammar problem type ID: 6). The phrase 'cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate in formal speech.

× But my sister had a teacher when he was seven years old and I used to hear their instruction and.

✓ But my sister had a teacher when she was seven years old, and I used to hear her instructions.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect for 'my sister'; it should be 'she' (Grammar problem type ID: 12). Also, 'their instruction' should be 'her instructions' to agree with singular 'teacher' and to use the correct possessive pronoun (Grammar problem type ID: 12). The sentence was incomplete; adding a period completes it (Grammar problem type ID: 26).

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ For whom do you want to sing?

In formal English, prepositions should not end sentences. 'For whom do you want to sing?' is grammatically correct, though in spoken English the original is common. This is a style suggestion rather than a strict grammar error (Grammar problem type ID: 11).

× Basically, I love to sing for my own cause singing is a part of my life that I can express my feeling with others.

✓ Basically, I love to sing for my own cause; singing is a part of my life through which I can express my feelings to others.

The phrase 'for my own cause' is unclear; it should be 'for myself' or 'on my own behalf' (Grammar problem type ID: 12). 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the context (Grammar problem type ID: 1). Also, 'with others' should be 'to others' to correctly express the direction of expression (Grammar problem type ID: 11).

× But I love to sing with my friends and my special for persons too.

✓ But I love to sing with my friends and my special persons too.

The phrase 'my special for persons' is incorrect. It should be 'my special persons' or better 'my special people' (Grammar problem type ID: 12). The preposition 'for' is unnecessary here (Grammar problem type ID: 11).

× Yes, singing can bring happiness for some particular people, but sometimes singing also can bring their expression of feelings, create multiple multiple things that they want to achieve, and sometimes they can be sorrow.

✓ Yes, singing can bring happiness to some particular people, but sometimes singing can also bring out their expression of feelings, create many things that they want to achieve, and sometimes they can feel sorrow.

The preposition 'for' should be 'to' after 'bring happiness' (Grammar problem type ID: 11). 'Bring their expression of feelings' is awkward; 'bring out their expression of feelings' is better (Grammar problem type ID: 11). 'Multiple multiple things' is repetitive; 'many things' is correct (Grammar problem type ID: 13). 'They can be sorrow' is incorrect; it should be 'they can feel sorrow' (Grammar problem type ID: 13).