唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and contains redundancy. Try to make your sentences more concise and clear, and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why singing helps you, and finally mention your preference for singing alone.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me improve my mood when I feel down. For instance, singing alone allows me to relax and forget my worries, which makes me feel better.

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to avoid repeating the same information and focus on giving a clear and direct response. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, be careful with grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity.

範例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons because singing has been my hobby since childhood. However, I often watch my favorite singer, Karanochkla, and try to imitate his style and rhythm.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentences and avoid hesitation sounds like 'uh'. Also, explain your reasons more smoothly using linking words.

範例: I prefer to sing for myself because singing alone makes me feel more comfortable and relaxed. Moreover, since I am not very confident about my singing skills, I worry that my friends might tease me if I sing in front of them.

建議: Your answer attempts to show different views but is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

範例: I believe that singing can bring happiness to people, although opinions may vary. For me, singing brings joy and helps me relax, especially when I am feeling down, as it improves my mood significantly.

× Yes, I like singing and I like to sing whenever I am in a bad mood.

✓ Yes, I like singing and I like to sing whenever I am in a bad mood.

This sentence is correct; no changes needed.

× And I like to sing and to enhance my mood as it makes my mood from as it as the singing who carries the ability that changes my mood from a bad to the good.

✓ I like to sing to enhance my mood because singing has the ability to change my mood from bad to good.

The original sentence is confusing and has redundant phrases. Simplifying the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× And I often like sing and I often like singing alone rather than on a public place.

✓ I often like singing alone rather than in a public place.

The phrase 'like sing' is incorrect; 'like singing' is the correct form. Also, 'on a public place' should be 'in a public place' (preposition correction).

× And I often like sing and I often like singing alone rather than on a public place.

✓ I often like singing alone rather than in a public place.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'in' when referring to a public place.

× No, I haven't learned yet about how to sing as singing as singing is my hobby since for my childhood.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing yet as singing has been my hobby since childhood.

The phrase 'since for my childhood' is incorrect; 'since childhood' is the correct expression. Also, 'haven't learned yet about how to sing' is awkward; 'haven't learned how to sing yet' is better.

× But I have never learned about how to sing.

✓ But I have never learned how to sing.

The phrase 'learned about how to sing' is incorrect; it should be 'learned how to sing'.

× I just watched my favorite singer Karanochkla like how he sing and like and tend to sing with his music be musical beats.

✓ I just watch my favorite singer Karanochkla, like how he sings and tend to sing along with his musical beats.

The verb tense should be present simple 'watch' to match the habitual action. 'He sing' should be 'he sings' (third person singular). 'Like and tend to sing with his music be musical beats' is awkward; corrected to 'tend to sing along with his musical beats'.

× I just watched my favorite singer Karanochkla like how he sing and like and tend to sing with his music be musical beats.

✓ I just watch my favorite singer Karanochkla, like how he sings and tend to sing along with his musical beats.

The verb 'sing' should be 'sings' to agree with the third person singular subject 'he'.

× I mostly like to sing for myself and I like to sing alone, uh sing alone because it makes it feels more comfortable and relaxed while singing alone rather than in a public.

✓ I mostly like to sing for myself and I like to sing alone because it feels more comfortable and relaxing while singing alone rather than in public.

'It makes it feels' is incorrect; it should be 'it feels'. Also, 'in a public' is incorrect; 'in public' is correct.

× I mostly like to sing for myself and I like to sing alone, uh sing alone because it makes it feels more comfortable and relaxed while singing alone rather than in a public.

✓ I mostly like to sing for myself and I like to sing alone because it feels more comfortable and relaxing while singing alone rather than in public.

The preposition 'in a public' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in public'.

× Because my singing skills are not that good like the other singers.

✓ Because my singing skills are not as good as those of other singers.

The phrase 'not that good like the other singers' is incorrect. The correct comparative structure is 'not as good as' and 'those of other singers' to refer properly.

× So I think my friends would make fun of me where if I sing, if I sing beyond them.

✓ So I think my friends would make fun of me if I sing in front of them.

The phrase 'where if I sing, if I sing beyond them' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'if I sing in front of them'.

× And there should be all as all persons have their different owner opinions.

✓ Everyone has their own different opinions.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. Simplifying to 'Everyone has their own different opinions' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× So it can't be said that singing can bring happiness or not.

✓ So it can't be said whether singing can bring happiness or not.

The phrase 'that singing can bring happiness or not' is incomplete; adding 'whether' clarifies the sentence.

× But according to my opinion, the singing brings a lot of happiness to me and a feel of joy to me.

✓ But in my opinion, singing brings a lot of happiness and a feeling of joy to me.

'According to my opinion' is incorrect; 'in my opinion' is correct. Also, 'the singing' is unnecessary; 'singing' as a general activity does not need 'the'. 'A feel of joy' should be 'a feeling of joy'.

× Whenever I sing, I feel very relaxed and my mood change from a bad to a good while while singing.

✓ Whenever I sing, I feel very relaxed and my mood changes from bad to good while singing.

The verb 'change' should be 'changes' to agree with the singular subject 'my mood'. Also, 'a bad to a good' should be 'bad to good' without articles. The repeated 'while' is a typo.