唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but it lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific reasons, and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Avoid redundancy and keep your sentences concise.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress, especially as a senior high school student. Moreover, singing clears my mind and boosts my creativity when I face challenges in life.

建議: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and contains unclear references (e.g., 'Melody and Ryan'). Make sure to explain your points clearly and avoid vague terms. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details about your experience.

範例: Yes, I learned to sing when I was in primary school. Our school offered a singing class where we learned about melody and rhythm. Although I wasn't very focused at the time, the lessons still helped me improve my singing skills.

建議: Your answer is heartfelt but unclear and contains grammatical mistakes and pronoun errors. Try to express your ideas clearly with correct grammar and pronouns. Start with a direct answer, then explain why, using linking words to connect your thoughts.

範例: I would like to sing for my mother because she is the most patient and loving person I know. Singing for her is my way of showing gratitude for everything she has done for me.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but is confusing due to unclear phrasing and grammar mistakes. Use clear sentences and appropriate linking words to explain your points logically. Provide specific examples to support your opinion.

範例: Absolutely, singing can bring happiness to people because it connects them emotionally. For instance, when someone feels upset, singing can cheer them up. Additionally, happy people can share their joy with others through singing, which helps create a positive atmosphere.

× Of course, I like first singing, can relax myself, relieve my stress because I'm a Senior High School student, and also it can help me clear my mind and think creatively with the challenge in my life.

✓ Of course, I like singing first; it can relax me, relieve my stress because I'm a Senior High School student, and also it can help me clear my mind and think creatively about the challenges in my life.

The phrase 'like first singing' is incorrect; 'like singing first' or simply 'like singing' is correct. Also, 'can relax myself' is incorrect because 'relax' is a transitive verb here and should take an object, so 'relax me' is correct. Additionally, 'with the challenge in my life' should be 'about the challenges in my life' to correctly express the idea.

× Of course I did, as I was in primary school.

✓ Of course I did, when I was in primary school.

The phrase 'as I was in primary school' is awkward; 'when I was in primary school' is the correct temporal expression to indicate the time of the action in the past.

× Our school organized a singing class that taught us about Melody and Ryan.

✓ Our school organized a singing class that taught us about melody and rhythm.

'Melody and Ryan' is incorrect; likely the intended words are 'melody and rhythm', which are musical terms. Also, these are common nouns and should not be capitalized.

× Absolutely. I want to thank for my mom. You know, my mom is the greatest woman in the world due to his patience and endless love more he's my mom. He's I just feel gratitude for it.

✓ Absolutely. I want to thank my mom. You know, my mom is the greatest woman in the world because of her patience and endless love. She is my mom, and I just feel gratitude for her.

The phrase 'thank for my mom' is incorrect; it should be 'thank my mom'. The pronouns 'his' and 'he's' are incorrect when referring to 'my mom', which is female; the correct pronouns are 'her' and 'she is'. The sentence structure is also fragmented and needs to be corrected for clarity.

× Absolutely, singing is a bridge to different people in different way.

✓ Absolutely, singing is a bridge to different people in different ways.

The phrase 'in different way' should be plural 'in different ways' to agree with 'different people' and to be grammatically correct.

× For example, people who feel upset can singing to cheer them up.

✓ For example, people who feel upset can sing to cheer themselves up.

After modal verb 'can', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'can sing' is correct, not 'can singing'. Also, 'cheer them up' is ambiguous; 'cheer themselves up' is clearer since the subject is 'people who feel upset'.

× The people who help happy can help others inside by thinking so.

✓ People who are happy can help others internally by thinking positively.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'The people who help happy' is incorrect; likely intended is 'people who are happy'. 'Help others inside by thinking so' is unclear; rephrased to 'help others internally by thinking positively' for clarity.

× However, when the world has changed, life is changed. Seeing can always bring happiness to people.

✓ However, when the world changes, life changes. Singing can always bring happiness to people.

'Seeing' is a typo or incorrect word; it should be 'singing'. Also, 'has changed' and 'is changed' are awkward; simple present tense 'changes' is better to express general truth.