唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác, ví dụ như 'I'm feel' nên là 'I feel', và câu hơi dài, lặp từ 'my my'. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ để câu trả lời hiệu quả hơn.

範例: I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my feelings. For example, when I go to karaoke with my friends, I feel very happy and all my stress disappears. Singing is a great way to unwind after a busy day.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng và tránh lặp từ như 'give up and give up'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và có cấu trúc mạch lạc, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I'm just feel lose my motivation' nên là 'I just felt like I lost my motivation'.

範例: I learned to sing when I was a child because my mother enrolled me in classes in the center of Bourbonnais. However, I didn't have much talent, so I lost motivation and eventually gave up.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'in around my comfort zone' nên là 'around my comfort zone'. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I don't have a specific person to sing for. I want to share my singing with people around me because music helps us connect with others.

建議: Bạn đã trả lời khá tốt với ý tưởng rõ ràng. Tuy nhiên, câu trả lời có thể được cải thiện bằng cách tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn hơn. Ngoài ra, nên dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Definitely. I believe music is a powerful tool that brings happiness to both others and ourselves. Even if we don't understand the language, the melody and rhythm can convey emotions like happiness or sadness, which is truly amazing.

× I'm feel very happy and it seems that all my attention is disappear and I think that karaoke or singing is a great way to unwind my my.

✓ I feel very happy and it seems that all my attention disappears and I think that karaoke or singing is a great way to unwind myself.

The phrase 'I'm feel' is incorrect because 'feel' should not be used with 'am' in this context; the correct form is 'I feel'. Also, 'is disappear' is incorrect; the verb 'disappear' should be in the simple present form 'disappears' to agree with the singular subject 'attention'. Additionally, 'unwind my my' is incorrect; the reflexive pronoun 'myself' should be used after 'unwind'. Suggestions: Use 'I feel' instead of 'I'm feel', use 'disappears' for singular subject, and use 'unwind myself'.

× I had learned when I was a kid because my mother took me to the classes in the central of Bourbonnais.

✓ I learned when I was a kid because my mother took me to classes in the center of Bourbonnais.

The past perfect tense 'had learned' is unnecessary here because the sentence simply narrates a past event without reference to another past event. The simple past 'learned' is appropriate. Also, 'the classes' should be 'classes' without 'the' because it refers to classes in general. 'Central' should be 'center' to refer to a place. Suggestions: Use simple past 'learned', remove 'the' before 'classes', and use 'center' instead of 'central'.

× However, I don't have any talent in singing so that I'm just feel lose my motivation and give up and give up.

✓ However, I don't have any talent in singing so I just feel like I have lost my motivation and gave up.

The phrase 'so that I'm just feel' is incorrect; 'so' should be used instead of 'so that' to indicate consequence. 'I'm just feel' is incorrect; it should be 'I just feel'. 'Lose' should be in past tense 'lost' to match the past action. Repetition of 'give up and give up' is redundant; one 'gave up' in past tense is sufficient. Suggestions: Use 'so' instead of 'so that', 'I just feel', past tense 'lost' and 'gave up'.

× I want to bring my voice, my singing to every person in around my comfort zone or just around me so that I feel that the music either way that we can connect with other people.

✓ I want to bring my voice, my singing to every person around my comfort zone or just around me so that I feel that music is a way we can connect with other people.

The phrase 'in around my comfort zone' is incorrect; 'in' should be removed because 'around' already indicates location. 'The music either way that we can connect' is awkward; it should be 'music is a way we can connect'. Suggestions: Remove 'in' before 'around', and rephrase the latter part for clarity.

× I think that music is the great tool for us to bring happiness to other people as well as ourselves.

✓ I think that music is a great tool for us to bring happiness to other people as well as ourselves.

The definite article 'the' is incorrect here because 'great tool' is a general statement, so the indefinite article 'a' should be used. Suggestions: Use 'a' instead of 'the' before 'great tool'.