唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. For example, say "I really like singing because it helps me express my feelings, even though my voice is not professional and sometimes noisy." Also, keep your answer concise and within 5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it allows me to express my feelings. Although my voice is not professional and sometimes sounds noisy, I still find joy in it.

建議: Focus on clarity and structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your opinion with linking words. For example, "No, I have never formally learned how to sing. However, I believe singing is about sharing feelings, so formal lessons are not always necessary. But if I had the chance, I would like to learn."

範例: No, I have never taken singing lessons. I believe singing is mainly about expressing your feelings. However, if I had the opportunity, I would like to learn how to sing properly.

建議: Good content and structure, but improve grammar and linking words for coherence. For example, say "If I had to choose, I would sing for my father because he always makes me smile. He is my favorite person since he has helped and supported me a lot. Singing for him would be a way to show my gratitude and make him happy."

範例: If I had to choose, I would sing for my father because he always makes me smile. He is my favorite person since he has helped and supported me in everything. Singing for him would be a way to show my gratitude and make him happy.

建議: Improve grammar and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it makes me happy too. Singing allows people to express their feelings, which can improve their mood."

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it makes me happy as well. Singing allows people to express their feelings, which can improve their mood and bring joy.

× Yes, I really like singing but my voice is not professional, so my sister told me that my voice is noisy but I like express my feeling quite singing.

✓ Yes, I really like singing but my voice is not professional, so my sister told me that my voice is noisy but I like to express my feelings quite through singing.

The phrase 'I like express' is incorrect; it should be 'I like to express' to properly use the verb 'like' followed by an infinitive. Also, 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the context. Adding 'through' clarifies the means of expression.

× Oh, I don't think so. I think, I don't think for them how to say just share your feeling and all things will be alright.

✓ Oh, I don't think so. I think, I don't think about how to say it; just share your feelings and all things will be alright.

The phrase 'I don't think for them how to say' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'about' after 'think'. Also, 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings'. Adding 'it' clarifies the object of 'say'.

× But I think if I have a chance to learn, maybe I will do it.

✓ But I think if I had a chance to learn, maybe I would do it.

The sentence expresses a hypothetical situation, so the correct modal verb form is 'would' instead of 'will', and the conditional clause should use past tense 'had' instead of 'have'.

× If I had to choose, I would sing from my father because he always makes me smile.

✓ If I had to choose, I would sing for my father because he always makes me smile.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'for' when indicating the person you sing to.

× He's my favorite person since he helped me a lot and supported me in everything.

✓ He's my favorite person because he has helped me a lot and supported me in everything.

The word 'since' is better replaced with 'because' to indicate reason. Also, present perfect 'has helped' is more appropriate to show ongoing relevance.

× I do think for him would be a way to show my gratitude and make him happy.

✓ I do think singing for him would be a way to show my gratitude and make him happy.

The phrase 'I do think for him' is unclear; adding 'singing' clarifies the subject. Also, 'for him' correctly indicates the beneficiary.

× Yes, I do think it can bring helping to people because it's make me happy either.

✓ Yes, I do think it can bring happiness to people because it makes me happy too.

The noun 'helping' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'happiness'. Also, 'it's make' should be 'it makes' for subject-verb agreement. 'Either' is replaced with 'too' for positive agreement.

× So I believe that also people can be happy from singing because it's you express your feeling through the thinking.

✓ So I believe that people can also be happy from singing because it allows you to express your feelings through thinking.

The phrase 'it's you express' is incorrect; it should be 'it allows you to express' to make grammatical sense. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings'. Placement of 'also' is adjusted for natural flow.