唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có nội dung rõ ràng, nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để tránh lỗi như 'when I alone' nên là 'when I am alone'. Ngoài ra, bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ như 'love' nhiều lần.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because I love music. Although my voice isn't very good, I find singing relaxing, especially when I am alone in my bathroom.

建議: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt cho chính xác hơn, ví dụ 'when I'm in primary school' nên là 'when I was in primary school'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để tăng tính hiệu quả.

範例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in primary school. Singing was also one of the subjects in secondary school, but I wasn't very good at it.

建議: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I really sorry' nên là 'I am really sorry'. Bạn nên dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và liên kết các ý bằng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I usually sing for myself because I am not confident about my voice. Singing alone makes me feel comfortable and relaxed.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'make my emotion is high' không đúng. Bạn nên diễn đạt ý tưởng rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để thể hiện quan điểm.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For me, singing every day lifts my mood and makes me feel joyful.

× Although my voice is not good, I still love singing, especially when I alone in my bathroom that makes me feel relaxing.

✓ Although my voice is not good, I still love singing, especially when I am alone in my bathroom; that makes me feel relaxed.

The sentence is missing the verb 'am' after the pronoun 'I', which is necessary for correct sentence structure. Also, 'relaxing' should be 'relaxed' to correctly describe the feeling experienced by the subject.

× Also in secondary school is one of our subject in the education, but I don't really good at this at all.

✓ Also, in secondary school, it is one of our subjects in education, but I am not really good at it at all.

The word 'subject' should be plural 'subjects' to agree with 'one of our'. The phrase 'I don't really good' is incorrect; it should be 'I am not really good'. The sentence also needs the pronoun 'it' to refer back to 'subject'.

× Because I really sorry about my voice.

✓ Because I am really sorry about my voice.

The verb 'am' is missing after the pronoun 'I'. 'I really sorry' is incorrect; it should be 'I am really sorry' to form a proper sentence.

× So I always sing when I'm alone and I think the answer is I I wanna sing for myself and this makes me feel comfortable.

✓ So I always sing when I'm alone, and I think the answer is I want to sing for myself, and this makes me feel comfortable.

The phrase 'I I wanna' contains a repeated pronoun and informal contraction 'wanna'. It should be corrected to 'I want to' for clarity and formality.

× Yes, I think not only singing is also out of music industry and for me singing make me happy everyday and make my emotion is high, always high.

✓ Yes, I think singing is not only part of the music industry, but for me, singing makes me happy every day and keeps my emotions high, always high.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing words, making it confusing. 'Not only singing is also out of music industry' is incorrect; it should be 'singing is not only part of the music industry'. Also, 'make my emotion is high' is incorrect; it should be 'makes my emotions high'.