唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence clarity. For example, instead of repeating 'sing a song', you can say 'I enjoy singing'. Also, correct grammar mistakes like 'it can't express' should be 'it helps me express'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing when I am at home because it helps me express my feelings and relieve stress. Singing allows me to relax and be myself in a comfortable environment.

建議: Avoid repeating phrases like 'sing a song' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, 'I have never taken singing seriously because I just do it for fun and personal happiness.'

範例: No, I have never formally learned to sing because I don't consider it a serious activity. I just sing for my own enjoyment and happiness.

建議: Improve clarity and coherence by organizing your ideas better. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases like 'I want to think for myself'. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly.

範例: I prefer to sing for myself because I am aware that my voice is not very good. Therefore, I don't feel comfortable singing for others.

建議: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details. For example, 'Yes, singing can bring happiness and peace to people. For instance, I often listen to calm songs by BTS, a popular K-pop boy band.'

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness and peace to people. For example, I enjoy listening to calm songs by BTS, a famous K-pop boy band, which helps me feel relaxed.

× I usually sing a song because it can't express my feeling at times and can relieve my stress stress.

✓ I usually sing a song because it can't express my feelings at times and can relieve my stress.

The word 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to correctly express multiple emotions. Also, the repetition of 'stress' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'stress'.

× No, I've never learned to sing a song because I don't want to take it as a serious thing in my life.

✓ No, I've never learned to sing a song because I don't want to take it as a serious thing in my life.

The sentence is correct in tense usage; no correction needed here.

× Well, I could say that I want to think for myself because I just want to sing for myself.

✓ Well, I could say that I want to sing for myself because I just want to sing for myself.

The phrase 'think for myself' is incorrect in this context; the student likely meant 'sing for myself'. The pronoun use is correct but the verb choice is wrong.

× I don't want to. I don't have a feeling to think for the others because I know my voice.

✓ I don't want to. I don't have a feeling to sing for others because I know my voice.

The phrase 'to think for the others' is incorrect; it should be 'to sing for others' to match the context. Also, 'the others' should be 'others' without 'the'.

× Kind of like bad, yes.

✓ It's kind of bad, yes.

The phrase 'Kind of like bad' is ungrammatical. It should be 'It's kind of bad' to correctly express the idea with proper subject and verb.

× Yeah, of course singing can bring the happiness and peaceful for people.

✓ Yeah, of course singing can bring happiness and peace to people.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before uncountable nouns 'happiness' and 'peaceful' (which should be 'peace'). Also, 'peaceful' is an adjective; the noun 'peace' is correct here.

× For example, I usually listen a song from BTS.

✓ For example, I usually listen to a song from BTS.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. The correct phrase is 'listen to a song'.

× This their song is very calm.

✓ Their song is very calm.

The phrase 'This their song' is incorrect. Either 'This song' or 'Their song' is correct. Using both together is redundant and ungrammatical.