唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words like 'for example' or 'also'.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax. For example, I often sing while cooking or cleaning. Also, whenever I have free time, I like to learn new songs and practice them.

建議: Reduce hesitation and filler words to make your answer more fluent and natural. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific details. Use linking words like 'during' and 'however' to connect ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I learned Carnatic music during my childhood. My teacher taught me the basics, and I studied it for about five years. However, I had to stop because of study pressure.

建議: Make your answer clearer and more coherent by avoiding unnecessary words and repetitions. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'so' to explain reasons and results. Also, try to use correct grammar and sentence structure.

範例: Nowadays, I like to sing for my 4-and-a-half-year-old daughter because she enjoys music. She listens to me and even tries to sing along, which makes me very happy.

建議: Improve your answer by using more precise vocabulary and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to connect ideas logically. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases.

範例: Yes, definitely. Singing helps us relax and reduces stress because many people face busy schedules and personal issues. Therefore, singing can improve our mood and bring happiness.

× I always do singing while cooking, while cleaning my houses.

✓ I always sing while cooking and cleaning my house.

The phrase 'do singing' is incorrect; the verb 'do' is not used with 'singing' in this context. Instead, the base verb 'sing' should be used. Also, 'houses' should be singular 'house' if referring to one's own home.

× Whenever I have the time, I will always learn a new music, new songs and I always try to sing that one.

✓ Whenever I have time, I always learn new music and new songs, and I always try to sing them.

The phrase 'a new music' is incorrect because 'music' is an uncountable noun and does not take 'a'. Also, 'that one' is unclear when referring to multiple songs; 'them' is appropriate.

× I learned Carnatic music and uh, uh, my teacher, she, uh, she taught me like, uh, the basics of the Carnatic music.

✓ I learned Carnatic music, and my teacher taught me the basics of Carnatic music.

The sentence has unnecessary fillers and repetition. Also, 'the Carnatic music' should be 'Carnatic music' without 'the' as it is a general term.

× I learned that through around five years.

✓ I learned that for around five years.

The preposition 'through' is incorrect here; 'for' is used to indicate duration of time.

× I always nowadays I'm like a A singing for my kid.

✓ Nowadays, I am always singing for my kid.

The phrase 'I'm like a A singing' is incorrect and unclear. The correct form is 'I am always singing' to express habitual action in present tense.

× while cleaning my houses.

✓ while cleaning my house.

If referring to one's own home, 'house' should be singular, not plural 'houses'.

× she will be like a A as a listener for me.

✓ she listens to me as a listener.

The phrase 'she will be like a A as a listener for me' is awkward and incorrect. It should be simplified to 'she listens to me' or 'she is my listener'.

× that makes me more happier.

✓ that makes me happier.

The word 'more' is unnecessary before the comparative adjective 'happier'. Using both is redundant.

× Yes definitely singing help us to relax our mood and it also alleviates our stress.

✓ Yes, definitely singing helps us to relax our mood and also alleviates our stress.

The verb 'help' should be in third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'.

× We all have stress for our in our life because of our busy work schedule and there's some issues in our home.

✓ We all have stress in our life because of our busy work schedule, and there are some issues at our home.

The phrase 'stress for our in our life' is incorrect; it should be 'stress in our life'. Also, 'there's some issues' should be 'there are some issues' to agree in number. 'In our home' is better as 'at our home'.

× it makes us like a more happier.

✓ it makes us happier.

The phrase 'like a more happier' is incorrect and redundant. 'Happier' alone suffices as the comparative adjective.