唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答不够清晰，存在语法错误和表达混乱，建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用具体的细节支持。例如，说明唱歌如何帮助你放松和表达情感。

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. When I sing, I feel happy and fulfilled.

建議: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够连贯。建议直接回答问题，说明是否学过唱歌，并解释原因，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: I have never taken professional singing lessons because I am very busy. Instead, I have taught myself by practicing at home.

建議: 回答中有语法和用词错误，表达不够清晰。建议简洁明了地回答问题，说明你想为谁唱歌，并解释原因，使用恰当的词汇。

範例: I want to sing for my future loved one because it is a meaningful way to express my feelings and love.

建議: 回答中有多处语法错误和重复，表达不够连贯。建议用简洁的句子表达观点，说明唱歌如何传递情感并带来快乐。

範例: Definitely, singing is more than just music; it is a language that expresses emotions. When people sing, they can share their feelings and make others feel happy.

× Yeah, still likes him.

✓ Yeah, I still like it.

这里主语是第一人称单数“I”，动词应使用原形“like”，而不是第三人称单数形式“likes”。另外，句中“him”用法不当，应改为指代“singing”的“it”。

× Because I think Sam is a way to relax myself and I also like to sing.

✓ Because I think singing is a way to relax myself and I also like to sing.

句中“Sam”应为“singing”，且“myself”用法不当，通常说“relax myself”不自然，建议保留或改为“relax”。

× I also like to sing to UMM, to release my emotion so that I feel a selfie fulfillment as a fulfillment.

✓ I also like to sing to release my emotions so that I feel a sense of fulfillment.

“sing to UMM”中“to UMM”无意义，应去掉或改为“to release”。“selfie fulfillment”错误，应为“a sense of fulfillment”。

× I've I've never learned how to sing Umm, first of all, I'm so busy to learn how to sin.

✓ I've never learned how to sing. Umm, first of all, I was too busy to learn how to sing.

“I'm so busy to learn”时态和表达不正确，应为过去时“was too busy to learn”。

× So I learned it by myself.

✓ So I learned it by myself.

此句无语法错误，保持不变。

× I didn't take a professional class recent and it's also another ability.

✓ I didn't take a professional class recently and it's also another ability.

“recent”应为副词“recently”修饰动词。

× I don't need to learn about it.

✓ I don't need to learn it.

“learn”后不需要介词“about”，直接加宾语。

× I want this song for the one I love in my future.

✓ I want to sing this song for the one I love in my future.

缺少动词“to sing”，使句子完整。

× I think that's meaningful and also I want to write a song for the ones who I love.

✓ I think that's meaningful and also I want to write a song for the ones whom I love.

“who”作宾语时应使用“whom”。

× And I think sin is a good way to relate your immersion and to tell your and to tell your true love.

✓ And I think singing is a good way to release your emotions and to express your true love.

“sin”应为“singing”，“relate your immersion”错误，应为“release your emotions”，“to tell your and to tell your true love”表达不完整，改为“express your true love”。

× Definitely sin is more than more than a song.

✓ Definitely singing is more than just a song.

“sin”应为“singing”，且“more than more than”重复，应改为“more than just”。

× It's like a language and there and you can't, you can't hide you're happy, you're sad and your sons.

✓ It's like a language and you can't hide you're happy, you're sad and your songs.

“there and”多余，应删去；“your sons”应为“your songs”。

× So people might feel your emotions in your scene.

✓ So people might feel your emotions in your singing.

“scene”应为“singing”，意思为“唱歌时”。

× So if you if you if you send to people, they might feel happy.

✓ So if you sing to people, they might feel happy.

“send”应为“sing”，且“if you if you if you”重复，应删去多余部分。