唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and slight awkwardness in phrasing. For example, "it boosted my mood" should be "it boosts my mood" to maintain present tense consistency. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary and avoid repeating similar ideas. Keep your sentences concise and natural.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relieve stress after a long day. For instance, singing my favourite songs always boosts my mood and gives me a more positive outlook. I find it an excellent way to relax and forget my worries.

建議: Your answer is well-structured and relevant, but you could improve coherence by using linking words such as "for example" or "also". Additionally, try to use more precise vocabulary, for instance, "teachers taught us various singing techniques" instead of "told us different singing techniques". This will make your answer sound more natural and fluent.

範例: Yes, I have some experience learning how to sing. For example, I joined the school choir in primary school, where teachers taught us various singing techniques. It was a fun experience because I enjoyed practising with my classmates and improving my voice.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, which affects naturalness and coherence. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Also, pay attention to subject-verb agreement and correct word forms. For example, say "I want to sing with Eason Chan, a famous singer from Hong Kong, because he inspires me and singing has become a daily habit."

範例: I would like to sing with Eason Chan, a famous singer from Hong Kong. He is one of my favourite artists and has inspired me to make singing a part of my daily life. It would be really enjoyable and exciting to perform with him.

建議: Your answer addresses the question well and includes a scientific explanation, which is good. However, there are some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as "bring cheerful to people" instead of "bring happiness to people" and "hormones which is called dopamine" instead of "a hormone called dopamine". Try to use linking words to improve coherence and make your sentences more natural.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. When we sing, our brains produce a hormone called dopamine, which helps us feel happy and relaxed. Therefore, singing is a great way to improve our mood.

× For example, when I sing my favorite songs, it boosted my mood and gave me a more positive mindset.

✓ For example, when I sing my favorite songs, it boosts my mood and gives me a more positive mindset.

The sentence mixes present tense ('sing') with past tense verbs ('boosted', 'gave'). To maintain consistency and match the habitual action implied by 'when I sing', the verbs should be in the present tense ('boosts', 'gives').

× I remember joining the school choir when I was in primary school and teachers often told us different singing techniques.

✓ I remember joining the school choir when I was in primary school and teachers often told us different singing techniques.

This sentence is correct as it uses past tense appropriately to describe past events. No correction needed.

× I want you singing with Eason Chan who is a singer in Hong Kong in.

✓ I want to sing with Eason Chan, who is a singer in Hong Kong.

The phrase 'I want you singing' is incorrect; it should be 'I want to sing'. Also, the preposition 'in' at the end is unnecessary and misplaced. The sentence is corrected to express the intended meaning clearly.

× I am his fans and he also inspired me for singing and being the habit in my daily life.

✓ I am his fan and he also inspired me to sing and make it a habit in my daily life.

'Fans' is plural but the subject is singular 'I', so it should be 'fan'. The phrase 'inspired me for singing' is incorrect; the correct form is 'inspired me to sing'. 'Being the habit' is awkward; it should be 'make it a habit'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× It is really enjoy and happy to singing with him.

✓ It is really enjoyable and happy to sing with him.

'Enjoy' is a verb, but here an adjective is needed; 'enjoyable' is correct. 'Happy' is an adjective but the sentence structure is awkward; better to say 'It is really enjoyable and makes me happy to sing with him.' Also, 'to singing' should be 'to sing' as the infinitive form is required after 'to'.

× Yes, from my perspective, singing can bring cheerful to people because when we are singing our brain will produce the hormones which is called dopamine that can make us feel happy and relax.

✓ Yes, from my perspective, singing can bring cheer to people because when we are singing our brain produces hormones called dopamine that can make us feel happy and relaxed.

'Bring cheerful' is incorrect; the noun 'cheer' should be used. 'The hormones which is called dopamine' should be 'hormones called dopamine' to agree in number and be more natural. 'Feel happy and relax' should be 'feel happy and relaxed' because 'relaxed' is the correct adjective here.