唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your reasons with specific details.

範例: I don't really like singing because I don't have a good singing voice. Also, I feel shy and embarrassed when I have to sing in front of many people, so I usually hesitate to perform on stage.

建議: Improve your answer by using clearer sentence structures and linking words to explain your experience. Provide more specific details about why you felt demotivated and how you gave up singing.

範例: I started learning to sing when I was a child, but I didn't improve much, which made me feel demotivated. As a result, I eventually gave up on singing as a hobby.

建議: Make your answer more concise and natural by correcting grammar and avoiding filler words. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you want to sing for your family.

範例: I would choose to sing for my family because they are my closest friends. I believe they would encourage me and support me if I performed on stage, which makes singing for them very special.

建議: Clarify your answer by using correct grammar and linking words. Provide specific examples to explain how different types of songs can affect people's emotions.

範例: I think singing can bring happiness depending on the type of song. For example, if I sing a happy and relaxing song, it can influence people and make them feel joyful.

× Well, I'm particularly not fond of thing because I don't have a feature singing voice, and in addition I also feel shy and embarrassed during standing on the stage facing that many of people's uh, I will be hesitated.

✓ Well, I'm particularly not fond of singing because I don't have a good singing voice, and in addition, I also feel shy and embarrassed when standing on the stage facing so many people, so I hesitate.

The word 'thing' is incorrect here; it should be 'singing' to match the context. 'Feature singing voice' is incorrect; 'good singing voice' is appropriate. 'During standing' is incorrect; 'when standing' is correct. 'That many of people's' is incorrect; 'so many people' is correct. 'I will be hesitated' is incorrect; 'I hesitate' is correct. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Well, I started singing when I was a child but it turned out to be a very bad result and I just feel demotivated. Then eventually I just give up this interest.

✓ Well, I started singing when I was a child but it turned out to be a very bad experience and I just felt demotivated. Then eventually I just gave up this interest.

The phrase 'feel demotivated' should be in past tense 'felt demotivated' to match the past context. 'Give up' should be in past tense 'gave up' to maintain tense consistency. 'Bad result' is better expressed as 'bad experience' for naturalness.

× Well, I definitely would choose to sing for my family because they are my closing friends and I would, I believe that they will encourage me and they will, uh, give me the best wish if I sing on the stage. And I think that's a very lovely things.

✓ Well, I definitely would choose to sing for my family because they are my closest friends and I believe that they will encourage me and give me their best wishes if I sing on the stage. And I think that's a very lovely thing.

The phrase 'closing friends' is incorrect; it should be 'closest friends'. 'Give me the best wish' should be 'give me their best wishes' to correctly use pronouns and plural form. 'That's a very lovely things' should be 'that's a very lovely thing' to match singular form.

× Well, I think it depends on the songs, whether the songs it's a happy songs or it's a quite sadly song. For example, if I sing quite happy and relax song then people might might influence by that and they they will feel happy as well.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the songs, whether the songs are happy songs or quite sad songs. For example, if I sing a quite happy and relaxing song, then people might be influenced by that and they will feel happy as well.

'It's a happy songs' is incorrect; it should be 'the songs are happy songs' to agree in number and verb. 'Quite sadly song' should be 'quite sad songs' using the adjective form. 'Relax song' should be 'relaxing song' to use the correct adjective form. 'Might might influence by that' should be 'might be influenced by that' to use correct passive voice and modal verb. Repetition of 'they' is removed for clarity.