唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có nội dung rõ ràng, tuy nhiên có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác, ví dụ như 'inspired my emotions' nên là 'inspires my emotions', 'I'm straight or sad' nên là 'I'm stressed or sad', và 'I like to see my favorite song' nên là 'I like to listen to my favorite song'. Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và ngữ pháp chính xác hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing. My parents taught me how to sing when I was a child, which inspired me a lot. Singing helps me feel relaxed and lifts my mood, especially when I'm stressed or sad. For example, whenever I feel down, I like to listen to my favorite songs because they always cheer me up.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'I can say both yes or no' không rõ nghĩa, và câu 'So and.' không cần thiết và gây rối. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh những phần không liên quan để câu trả lời hiệu quả hơn.

範例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing from my parents since my family has a tradition of artists. However, I have never taken any formal singing classes because my parents believe their guidance at home is enough for me.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng, ví dụ 'people who loves me' nên là 'people who love me', 'I always have a dream' nên là 'I have always had a dream', và câu 'So if I can become a singer real.' không hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên luyện tập cách nối câu và sử dụng thì đúng để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn.

範例: I would like to sing for people who love me and appreciate my voice. Since I was a child, I have always dreamed of becoming a singer. If I become a professional singer one day, I want to perform on stage and sing for my fans because it makes me feel relaxed and happy.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cách diễn đạt còn lặp lại và có lỗi phát âm (như 'comf comfortable'). Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng phong phú hơn và tránh lặp từ, đồng thời sắp xếp câu hợp lý để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because music can improve our emotions. For example, when I feel sad, disappointed, or stressed, I often listen to music to help me relax and feel better. It really helps me reduce stress and lifts my mood.

× When I was a child, my parents taught me how to sing and perform and which inspired me a lot.

✓ When I was a child, my parents taught me how to sing and perform, which inspired me a lot.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'and which' creating a grammatical error. The correct form is to use a comma before 'which' to introduce a relative clause referring to the entire preceding clause. This improves sentence clarity and correctness.

× Singing helps me feel relaxed and inspired my emotions, especially when I'm straight or sad.

✓ Singing helps me feel relaxed and inspires my emotions, especially when I'm stressed or sad.

The phrase 'inspired my emotions' is incorrect; it should be 'inspires my emotions' to match the subject 'Singing'. Also, 'straight' is a wrong word choice; the correct word is 'stressed' to express feeling under pressure or anxiety.

× For example, whenever I feel down, I like to see my favorite song which always cheers me up.

✓ For example, whenever I feel down, I like to listen to my favorite song which always cheers me up.

The verb 'see' is incorrect when referring to experiencing a song. The correct verb is 'listen to' because songs are heard, not seen.

× I can say both yes or no.

✓ I can say both yes and no.

The phrase 'both yes or no' is incorrect; the correct conjunction to use with 'both' is 'and', not 'or'.

× So and.

✓ (Remove this fragment as it is incomplete and meaningless.)

The phrase 'So and.' is an incomplete sentence fragment and does not convey any meaning. It should be removed for clarity and correctness.

× I would like to sing for people who loves me, who loves my voice because when I was a kid, I always have a dream to become a singer in the future.

✓ I would like to sing for people who love me, who love my voice because when I was a kid, I always had a dream to become a singer in the future.

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'people' which is plural, so the verb should be 'love' not 'loves'. Also, 'I always have a dream' should be in past tense 'I always had a dream' to match the past time reference.

× So if I can become a singer real.

✓ So if I can become a real singer.

The phrase 'become a singer real' is incorrect word order. The adjective 'real' should precede the noun 'singer'.

× So I want to stand as a state and sing for my fans.

✓ So I want to stand on stage and sing for my fans.

The phrase 'stand as a state' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'stand on stage' meaning to perform in front of an audience.

× I would like to sing for people who loves me, who loves my voice because when I was a kid, I always have a dream to become a singer in the future. So if I can become a singer real. So I want to stand as a state and sing for my fans. And yes, I feel it's so relaxed.

✓ I would like to sing for people who love me, who love my voice because when I was a kid, I always had a dream to become a singer in the future. So if I can become a real singer, I want to stand on stage and sing for my fans. And yes, I feel so relaxed.

Combined corrections for pronoun agreement, verb tense, word order, and phrase usage to improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think yes because umm music can improve your emotion.

✓ I think yes because umm music can improve your emotions.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because music can affect various feelings, not just one.

× Like for example when I feel sad, disappointed or stressed I often put up some music to feel more relaxed and comf comfortable and this make me feel like so good.

✓ For example, when I feel sad, disappointed, or stressed, I often play some music to feel more relaxed and comfortable, and this makes me feel so good.

The phrase 'put up some music' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'play some music'. Also, 'comf comfortable' is a typo and should be 'comfortable'. The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'this'.

× I'm really on my stress and I think it's good.

✓ I'm really stressed and I think it's good.

The phrase 'on my stress' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'I'm really stressed' to indicate feeling stress.