唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide specific reasons. For example, say "Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and clear my mind. Moreover, it connects me with people who appreciate peace and have different perspectives."

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and clear my mind. Moreover, it connects me with people who appreciate peace and have different perspectives.

建議: Make your answer more structured and fluent by directly answering the question first, then adding details with linking words. Avoid repetition and improve grammar. For example, "No, I have never taken any singing classes. However, I enjoy singing along to songs playing on my speaker."

範例: No, I have never taken any singing classes. However, I enjoy singing along to songs playing on my speaker.

建議: Avoid repeating 'so' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details. For example, "I would like to sing for my family and best friends because it brings me joy and feels meaningful. Sometimes, I choose songs that relate to their experiences."

範例: I would like to sing for my family and best friends because it brings me joy and feels meaningful. Sometimes, I choose songs that relate to their experiences.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Try to express your ideas clearly and concisely with proper grammar. Use linking words to explain why singing brings happiness. For example, "Yes, singing helps people feel happy and relaxed. It has been an important part of human life since the past because it brings joy and comfort."

範例: Yes, singing helps people feel happy and relaxed. It has been an important part of human life since the past because it brings joy and comfort.

× Yes, I like singing singing because it's relax me and also encourage me to come down to my mindset.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it relaxes me and also encourages me to calm my mind.

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'singing' which is singular, so the verbs should be in third person singular form 'relaxes' and 'encourages'. Also, 'come down to my mindset' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'calm my mind'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So also they connect me with people who like to peace and also different kind of mindset like me.

✓ It also connects me with people who like peace and have different kinds of mindsets like me.

The pronoun 'they' is unclear; 'it' referring to singing is appropriate. 'Like to peace' is incorrect; 'like peace' is correct. 'Different kind of mindset' should be plural 'different kinds of mindsets' to agree with 'people'. This correction improves pronoun reference and plural agreement.

× No, I didn't learn any classes and any courses for music and singing, but I I think with my speaker and along especially a very good songs playing I sing a little bit.

✓ No, I haven't taken any classes or courses for music and singing, but I think with my speaker and especially when very good songs are playing, I sing a little bit.

The phrase 'didn't learn any classes' is incorrect; 'haven't taken any classes' is the correct expression. Also, 'a very good songs' is incorrect; 'very good songs' is plural and does not need 'a'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and tense consistency.

× But no I do not take any classes for that.

✓ But no, I do not take any classes for that.

A comma after 'But no' improves sentence clarity. The present tense 'do not take' is acceptable here as the student is stating a current fact.

× So I would like to sing for my family and also my best friends.

✓ So I would like to sing for my family and my best friends.

The phrase 'and also' is redundant; 'and' suffices. This correction improves sentence conciseness and flow.

× So if I sing for them, it's very meaningful for me and also joyful for me.

✓ So if I sing for them, it is very meaningful and joyful for me.

Repeating 'for me' is redundant; removing the second instance improves sentence fluency.

× So sometimes I said some musics and some relatable music for them.

✓ So sometimes I sing some songs and some relatable music for them.

'Said' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'sing'. 'Musics' is uncountable and should be 'songs' for countable items. This correction fixes verb usage and noun countability.

× Yes, singing is very important to people get happy and people get to relax.

✓ Yes, singing is very important for people to be happy and to relax.

The phrase 'important to people get happy' is incorrect; it should be 'important for people to be happy'. This correction fixes the infinitive verb form after 'important'.

× It's very important for us because singing is very, very crucial for our lives lives because singing is very important to us In the past also people sing for sing and also.

✓ It's very important for us because singing is very crucial for our lives. In the past, people also sang for singing and other purposes.

The sentence is fragmented and repetitive. 'Lives lives' is a repetition error. 'People sing for sing' is unclear; corrected to 'people also sang for singing and other purposes' for clarity and past tense consistency.