唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, instead of repeating 'I like singing' and 'I feel embarrassed', you can combine ideas smoothly and correct grammar mistakes. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing, but only when I'm alone because I don't have a very good voice. Also, I feel embarrassed to sing in front of others, so I prefer to keep it private.

建議: Improve your answer by using correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structure. Avoid vague expressions like 'attached to events'. Instead, explain your experience more specifically and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: When I was a child, I used to watch TV programs where children sang very well. I tried to sing like them, but I couldn't, so I stopped practicing.

建議: Make your answer more natural by correcting grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about your feelings and experiences.

範例: I would like to sing for my close friend because I don't feel embarrassed around him. For example, I sang for him on his birthday, and he was very happy.

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure. Use more precise vocabulary and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

範例: Absolutely. Singing can bring happiness because it touches the heart and soul. For example, it can change our mood from sadness to joy, which is why I really enjoy it.

× Also I feel very embarrassed when I sing in front of another person like I mentioned before but it make it help me to.

✓ Also I feel very embarrassed when I sing in front of another person like I mentioned before but it makes me feel better.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, the phrase 'make it help me to' is incorrect; it should be 'makes me feel better' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Well, I remembered when I was a kid, I was attached to events and TV programs who show young and children sing very well.

✓ Well, I remember when I was a kid, I was attached to events and TV programs that showed young people and children singing very well.

The verb 'remembered' should be in the present tense 'remember' to match the context of recalling a memory. Also, 'who show' should be 'that showed' because 'programs' is an inanimate object and the past tense is needed to match the past time frame. Additionally, 'young and children' is incorrect; it should be 'young people and children'.

× I try to sing but it didn't work, so I stopped trying.

✓ I tried to sing but it didn't work, so I stopped trying.

The verb 'try' should be in the past tense 'tried' to be consistent with the past time frame indicated by 'didn't work' and 'stopped'.

× Actually. The only person I would think for is my friend.

✓ Actually, the only person I would think of is my friend.

The correct preposition to use with 'think' in this context is 'of', not 'for'. Also, the sentence should be connected properly with a comma instead of a period after 'Actually'.

× He's so close to me so I don't have to feel very embarrassing about my voice.

✓ He's so close to me that I don't have to feel very embarrassed about my voice.

The adjective 'embarrassing' describes something that causes embarrassment, but here the speaker is describing their own feeling, so the correct adjective is 'embarrassed'. Also, 'so' should be followed by 'that' to connect the clauses properly.

× I remember that time I think for him in his birthday and he was very happy about it.

✓ I remember that time I sang for him on his birthday and he was very happy about it.

The verb 'think' is incorrect here; the intended verb is 'sang' to indicate the action performed in the past. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'on' when referring to a specific day like a birthday.

× Singing can bring happiness to people because it touch the heart and the soul specially uh, for example, uh, it may change our moods from sad to very happy.

✓ Singing can bring happiness to people because it touches the heart and the soul, especially, for example, it may change our moods from sad to very happy.

The verb 'touch' should be in the third person singular form 'touches' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'specially' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'especially'. Commas are added for clarity.