唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: حاول تكون اجابتك اكثر طبيعية و مختصرة. لا تكرر نفس الفكرة اكثر من مرة و حاول تستخدم جمل واضحة و مترابطة. مثلاً، قل ليش ما تحب الغناء و اعطي سبب واحد واضح و بسيط.

範例: No, I don't like singing because I feel my voice is not good. I usually avoid singing or listening to my recordings because it makes me uncomfortable.

建議: حاول ترد مباشرة على السؤال و تستخدم جمل مترابطة. لا تخلط موضوع الغناء مع الرسم بدون ربط واضح. استخدم كلمات ربط مثل "instead" بشكل صحيح و وضح الفكرة.

範例: No, I have never learned how to sing. Instead, when I was a child, I took drawing courses because I was more interested in art.

建議: حاول تبدأ بجملة واضحة و مباشرة ثم تضيف تفاصيل داعمة باستخدام كلمات ربط مثل "because" و "so". اجعل الجمل قصيرة و واضحة لتكون اكثر طبيعية.

範例: If I could sing, I would sing for my mom because I love and admire her. I want to make her happy by singing a special song for mothers.

建議: حاول تكمل الجملة بشكل كامل و تستخدم كلمات ربط لتوضيح افكارك. اجعل اجابتك اكثر تنظيم و وضوح و تجنب التكرار.

範例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions. It helps them feel relaxed and comfortable, so singing is a good way to relieve stress.

× I haven't tried actually because I think my voice is ugly and I don't like my voice.

✓ I haven't actually tried because I think my voice is ugly and I don't like it.

The adverb 'actually' should be placed before the verb 'tried' to maintain correct sentence structure and natural English word order.

× Even when I'm recording something or I am sending a voice record to one of my friends I will not listen to after I send it to them.

✓ Even when I'm recording something or sending a voice message to one of my friends, I will not listen to it after I send it to them.

The sentence is missing 'it' after 'listen to' and 'voice record' is better expressed as 'voice message'. Also, the sentence needs a comma before 'I will not' to separate clauses properly.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

In American English, the past participle of 'learn' is commonly 'learned'. 'Learnt' is more common in British English. Depending on the variety, 'learned' is preferred here for consistency.

× But instead of this I tried to learn how to draw a beautiful pictures.

✓ But instead of this, I tried to learn how to draw beautiful pictures.

The article 'a' should be removed because 'pictures' is plural. Also, a comma is needed after 'this' to separate clauses.

× Especially when I was children I tried to take course for learning how to draw.

✓ Especially when I was a child, I tried to take a course to learn how to draw.

'Children' is plural, but the subject is singular 'I', so it should be 'a child'. Also, 'take course' needs an article 'a course', and 'for learning' should be 'to learn' for correct infinitive usage.

× Like I said, if I haven't had a chance to learn, but if I had, probably I would sing for my mom and I would sing a song that's special for mothers because I love her and I really admire her.

✓ Like I said, I haven't had a chance to learn, but if I had, I would probably sing for my mom and sing a song that's special for mothers because I love and really admire her.

The sentence has redundant conjunctions and awkward phrasing. 'If I haven't had' conflicts with 'but if I had'. Also, 'probably' should be placed before 'would'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I want to make her happy and I know that if I do something like this, she will be blessed.

✓ I want to make her happy, and I know that if I do something like this, she will be blessed.

A comma is needed before 'and' to separate independent clauses properly. The pronouns are correct.

× I think the singers, when they're singing, they feel relief because they can speak their emotions throughout the song and it's a good way to feel relaxed and more comfortable.

✓ I think singers, when they're singing, feel relief because they can express their emotions through the song, and it's a good way to feel relaxed and more comfortable.

'The singers' is changed to 'singers' for generalization. 'Speak their emotions' is incorrect; 'express their emotions' is the correct collocation. Also, 'throughout the song' is better as 'through the song'.

× I believe it's a good way and it's a good chance to try to sing if you have the ability and if you.

✓ I believe it's a good way and a good opportunity to try singing if you have the ability.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Chance' is better replaced with 'opportunity'. 'Try to sing' is better as 'try singing' for natural expression. The sentence is completed properly.