唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "interesting and fascinating to me" and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and lifts my spirits when I'm feeling down.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but could be more fluent and natural. Avoid repeating "how to sing" and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary.

範例: No, I haven't had the chance to learn singing properly yet because of time constraints, but I plan to take lessons in the future.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and contains some grammatical errors and unclear references (e.g., "his songs and her voice"). Make sure to complete your sentences and use correct pronouns. Also, clarify your ideas and avoid hesitation.

範例: If I had the chance, I would love to sing for a famous singer like Chesapeake because he is well-known for his vibrant voice and amazing songs.

建議: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. There are grammatical mistakes and unfinished sentences. Try to express your ideas clearly and fully, using linking words and specific examples to support your opinion.

範例: Absolutely. Singing can bring happiness because it helps people improve their mood when they feel sad. For example, music is often played at weddings and birthday parties to create a joyful atmosphere.

× I really enjoy singing as I find it quite interesting and fascinating to me.

✓ I really enjoy singing as I find it quite interesting and fascinating.

The phrase 'fascinating to me' is redundant because 'fascinating' already implies that it affects the speaker. Removing 'to me' makes the sentence clearer and more natural.

× Besides that, it gives me energy when I feel sad and when it helps me to unwind my mind.

✓ Besides that, it gives me energy when I feel sad and helps me to unwind my mind.

The original sentence has an incorrect structure with 'and when it helps me'. The corrected sentence removes the unnecessary 'when' to properly connect the two effects of singing.

× No, I have never learned how to sing so far as I have not got enough time to learn how to sing correctly.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing so far because I have not had enough time to learn how to sing correctly.

The phrase 'so far as' is incorrect here; 'because' is the appropriate conjunction to explain the reason. Also, 'have not got' is better expressed as 'have not had' to indicate possession of time in the present perfect tense.

× But in the future I have a plan to learn how to sing correctly.

✓ But in the future, I plan to learn how to sing correctly.

The phrase 'I have a plan to' is wordy; 'I plan to' is more natural and concise for expressing future intentions.

× Well, if I tell the truth, if I had the chance to sing for a famous singer, I would definitely choose Chesapeake because he's so famous for its songs and her voice is so vibrant and.

✓ Well, to tell the truth, if I had the chance to sing for a famous singer, I would definitely choose Chesapeake because he's so famous for his songs and his voice is so vibrant.

The pronouns 'its' and 'her' are incorrect when referring to Chesapeake, who is male. They should be replaced with 'his' to match the gender. Also, 'if I tell the truth' is better expressed as 'to tell the truth'. The sentence was incomplete and has been completed for clarity.

× Absolutely yes. To be honest, singing can bring happens to people because when people feel sad, they listen to musics in order to improve their mood.

✓ Absolutely yes. To be honest, singing can bring happiness to people because when people feel sad, they listen to music in order to improve their mood.

The word 'happens' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'happiness'. Also, 'musics' is incorrect as 'music' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralised.

× Additionally, at the wedding or the birthday parties, definitely the.

✓ Additionally, at weddings or birthday parties, singing definitely brings joy.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb and object. The corrected sentence completes the thought and improves clarity and grammatical correctness.