唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is informative but a bit long and slightly unclear at the end. Try to keep your response concise and directly answer the question with clear reasons. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it has been my profession for the last seven years. I have recorded many songs in different languages like Hindi, English, and Punjabi. Singing brings me positivity and helps me express myself.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Try to give a clear and complete response with a topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I have learnt singing continuously, especially different genres. When I was in India, I was a good singer, and now in Cyprus, I share my singing videos on Instagram to connect with my audience.

建議: Your answer provides good content but is a bit repetitive and ends abruptly. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

範例: I like to sing for my family, including my parents, and also for my fans. I share my songs on Instagram, and many people encourage me to perform in concerts and stage shows.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but is filled with hesitations and some unclear phrases. Try to speak confidently and clearly, use linking words to connect your points, and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, be specific and concise.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because many people are stressed due to busy schedules. When they listen to my songs, they feel relaxed and positive.

× Yes, I do like singing as I will say that the singing is my profession from the last seven years and I have recorded so many songs as well as in Hindi, English, Haryanvi, Punjabi and cultural songs also.

✓ Yes, I do like singing as I would say that singing has been my profession for the last seven years and I have recorded many songs in Hindi, English, Haryanvi, Punjabi, and cultural songs as well.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'will say' instead of 'would say' to express a polite assertion. Also, 'is my profession from the last seven years' should be 'has been my profession for the last seven years' to correctly use present perfect tense for an action continuing up to now. 'So many songs as well as in' is awkward; 'many songs in' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I learnt every day like how to sing in different genres because I'm I'm a very, I'm a very good singer when I was in India, but when I came here in Cyprus, I usually sing on my Instagram and record videos and put videos on my social media and I always.

✓ Yes, I learn every day how to sing in different genres because I am a very good singer. When I was in India, I was a very good singer, but when I came here to Cyprus, I usually sing on my Instagram, record videos, and post them on my social media.

The sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'learnt' for a habitual action, which should be present tense 'learn'. The sentence is also fragmented and repetitive; it needs restructuring for clarity and correct tense usage. 'Put videos' should be 'post videos' for correct collocation.

× Singing is the main purpose of uh, bringing happiness to the peoples in the people's lives.

✓ Singing is the main purpose of bringing happiness to people in their lives.

The word 'peoples' is incorrect here; 'people' is the correct plural noun for persons. Also, 'the people's lives' is redundant and awkward; 'people in their lives' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× And uh, if they, uh, if they uh, hear the songs of mine, I would say they will indefinitely resonate themselves and get a positive vibes.

✓ And if they hear my songs, I would say they will definitely resonate with them and get positive vibes.

The modal verb 'would say' is acceptable here as a polite assertion. 'Indefinitely' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'definitely'. 'Resonate themselves' is incorrect; the verb 'resonate' is intransitive and should be followed by 'with'. 'A positive vibes' is incorrect because 'vibes' is plural and should not have 'a'.