唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sau đó giải thích lý do một cách cụ thể và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói về ước mơ từ nhỏ và lợi ích của việc hát đối với cảm xúc một cách rõ ràng hơn.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because I have dreamed of becoming a singer since I was a little girl. Moreover, singing helps me express my emotions and feel happier.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ hoàn chỉnh và cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lớp học hát để câu trả lời sinh động hơn. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói về thời gian học và những gì bạn đã học được.

範例: Yes, I took a singing class last year where I learned how to sing songs properly and improve my vocal skills.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và lặp từ. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy giải thích lý do bạn muốn hát cùng người đó.

範例: I would love to sing with my favorite singer, Taylor Swift, because she has a bright voice and I admire her musical style.

建議: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lỗi như 'If the IT is'. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và đưa ra ví dụ cụ thể về các loại bài hát và cảm xúc mà chúng mang lại.

範例: I think singing can bring happiness depending on the song's content. For example, a ballad might make people feel sad, while an upbeat song can make them feel joyful.

× Well, I really love singing because my dream when I was a little girl it become a singer and I think singing will bring many benefits for your emotions.

✓ Well, I really love singing because my dream when I was a little girl was to become a singer, and I think singing will bring many benefits to your emotions.

The original sentence has a sentence structure error due to missing verbs and incorrect word order. 'My dream when I was a little girl it become a singer' is incorrect; it should be 'my dream when I was a little girl was to become a singer'. Also, 'bring many benefits for your emotions' should be 'bring many benefits to your emotions' because 'benefits' are usually followed by 'to'. To improve, ensure the sentence has a clear subject and verb and use correct prepositions.

× Actually, last year I took part in sing class and I can learn how to sing a song very well.

✓ Actually, last year I took part in a singing class and I learned how to sing a song very well.

The sentence has a past tense issue and incorrect noun form. 'Sing class' should be 'singing class' because 'singing' is the correct noun form here. Also, 'I can learn' is present tense, but the action happened last year, so it should be past tense 'I learned'. To improve, match verb tenses to the time frame and use correct noun forms.

× My favorite singer is Taylor Swift and she is a person who has a bright voice and she is the person who I really want to sing with.

✓ My favorite singer is Taylor Swift, and she is a person who has a bright voice, and she is the person with whom I really want to sing.

The sentence uses an informal preposition ending 'sing with'. In formal English, prepositions should not be left at the end of the sentence. The correct form is 'the person with whom I really want to sing'. Also, adding commas improves clarity. To improve, avoid ending sentences with prepositions in formal contexts and use correct relative pronouns.

× Well it really depends on content of the song. If the IT is the ballad song, it can make people feel sad or it's a happiness song, it can bring happiness to people.

✓ Well, it really depends on the content of the song. If it is a ballad song, it can make people feel sad, or if it's a happy song, it can bring happiness to people.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun use and article omission. 'If the IT is the ballad song' is incorrect; 'the IT' is wrong, it should be 'it'. Also, 'a happiness song' is incorrect; 'happy song' is the correct adjective form. Additionally, 'content' needs the definite article 'the'. To improve, use correct pronouns, articles, and adjective forms.