唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误，如“the talented”应为“talent”，且表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，并注意时态一致性。

範例: Yes, I like singing because I have a natural talent for it. When I was at university, I joined the choir and often performed at public and school events.

建議: 回答不够连贯，存在语法和表达错误，如“a official group”应为“an official group”，且最后一句不完整。建议使用连词使句子更流畅，并完整表达意思。

範例: Yes, I joined the university's official choir, where we practiced singing skills every Friday at noon. This also earned me some academic credits required by the school.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，如“I'm not that kind of brave people”应为“I'm not that brave”，且表达不够自然。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和表达方式。

範例: I prefer to sing for myself because I'm not very confident singing in front of others. When I perform publicly, I get very nervous and start shaking, but singing alone feels completely different.

建議: 回答不清晰，句子结构混乱，表达不完整。建议明确表达观点，使用具体细节支持，并避免无关词汇。

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because music and lyrics can stimulate the brain, helping people to relax and feel joyful.

× I think I have the talented in it.

✓ I think I have the talent in it.

这里“talented”是形容词，表示“有天赋的”，而句子需要名词“talent”表示“天赋”，所以应使用名词形式。

× I joined the chorus, which often performed in front of the public and school events.

✓ I joined the chorus, which often performed in front of the public and at school events.

“school events”前应加介词“at”表示在学校活动场合，缺少介词导致表达不完整。

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

“learnt”和“learned”都是“learn”的过去分词，英式英语用“learnt”，美式英语用“learned”，根据上下文选择统一用法。此处可接受，但建议统一。

× Yes, as I just say, I entered the chorus, which is a official group in the university.

✓ Yes, as I just said, I entered the chorus, which is an official group in the university.

“as I just say”时态错误，应为过去时“said”；“a official”前应使用“an”因为“official”以元音音素开头。

× We have to learn the same skills every Friday at noon.

✓ We have to learn the same skills every Friday at noon.

此句无明显语法错误，符合语法规则。

× But it also can give me some credits, you know, the school which need me to. Fill 12.

✓ But it can also give me some credits, you know, which the school requires me to take.

句子结构混乱，“the school which need me to”不完整且语法错误，应改为“which the school requires me to take”表示学校要求我修的学分。

× I don't want to sing for anyone. I just want to sing for myself because I'm not that kind of brave people.

✓ I don't want to sing for anyone. I just want to sing for myself because I'm not that kind of brave person.

“people”是复数，前面用“that kind of”应接单数名词“person”，保持数的一致。

× And when I sing to the public, I just shaking, you know, can't help shaking.

✓ And when I sing to the public, I just shake, you know, can't help shaking.

“I just shaking”缺少谓语动词，应为“I just shake”，表示习惯性动作。

× But when I sing by myself, that is totally different.

✓ But when I sing by myself, it is totally different.

“that”指代不明确，改为“it”更符合指代习惯。

× Yes, because the sun and the music, the lyrics, every note can stimulate the brain, helping you to feel relaxed and some sing.

✓ Yes, because the sound and the music, the lyrics, every note can stimulate the brain, helping you to feel relaxed and sing.

“the sun”应为“the sound”，且“some sing”不合语法，应为“sing”表示动作。