唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors that make it difficult to understand. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use simple, correct sentences. Also, keep your answer concise and relevant to the question.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. My mother used to sing a lot at home, which inspired me to enjoy music as well.

建議: Your answer is confusing and contains many grammatical mistakes. Focus on answering the question directly with a clear topic sentence, and provide specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words to improve coherence.

範例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing because I was shy as a child and found it difficult to join singing classes with other children.

建議: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Try to give a clear and concise response with a topic sentence, followed by specific details. Avoid filler words and organize your ideas logically using linking words.

範例: I would like to sing for my family because they support me and it makes me happy to share music with them.

建議: Your answer has some good ideas but is unclear due to grammar and word choice errors. Try to express your opinion clearly with correct grammar and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because cheerful songs can lift our mood, while sad songs might make us feel down.

× Well, if I'm honest with you, thinking is an exciting activity for anyone and as far as I remember, my mom had happiness, a characteristic and singing all the time at home.

✓ Well, if I'm honest with you, singing is an exciting activity for anyone and as far as I remember, my mom had happiness, a characteristic, and sang all the time at home.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'thinking' instead of 'singing' which is the topic. Also, 'singing' should be in past tense 'sang' to match the past context. The adjective 'embarrassing' is misused later but here the main issue is the verb form and word choice.

× But because of my embarrassing characteristic I'm I didn't.

✓ But because of my embarrassing characteristic, I didn't.

The phrase 'I'm I didn't' is incorrect and confusing. It should be 'I didn't' to indicate the negative past action. Also, a comma is needed after 'characteristic' to separate clauses.

× So to be honest with you, as far as I remember from my childhood terms, I was an embarrassing kid and it's it was so hard to connect with another another children to take apart in the training singing and.

✓ So to be honest with you, as far as I remember from my childhood, I was an embarrassing kid and it was so hard to connect with other children to take part in singing training.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and redundancy. 'It's it was' should be 'it was' for past tense. 'Another another children' is incorrect; 'other children' is correct plural form. 'Take apart' should be 'take part'. 'Training singing' should be 'singing training' for correct word order.

× As I told you before this question, because of my, umm, embarrassing characteristic, when I was a child, I didn't think at all.

✓ As I told you before this question, because of my, umm, embarrassing characteristic, when I was a child, I didn't sing at all.

The phrase 'I didn't think at all' is illogical in context; the student likely meant 'I didn't sing at all'. The pronoun 'think' is incorrect here.

× But during my, uh, during that time, Passover, I was, I'm getting older, I think for myself on the mirror.

✓ But during that time, as I was getting older, I would look at myself in the mirror and think.

The original sentence is fragmented and confusing. 'Passover' seems misplaced or incorrect. 'I was, I'm getting older' mixes tenses. The corrected sentence clarifies the time frame and action with proper structure.

× Well, you know, for asking. To your question, it's quiet and completely depends on what kind of, uh, music you singing.

✓ Well, you know, to answer your question, it quite completely depends on what kind of music you are singing.

'For asking. To your question' is incorrect; 'to answer your question' is correct. 'You singing' lacks auxiliary verb; it should be 'you are singing'. 'Quiet' should be 'quite'.

× Some of them happiness things, and some of them get anyone else depressing failed.

✓ Some of them bring happiness, and some of them make others feel depressed.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Some of them happiness things' is incorrect; it should be 'Some of them bring happiness'. 'Get anyone else depressing failed' is incorrect; 'make others feel depressed' is the correct expression.