唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'favorite activities' nên là 'favorite activity'. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sắp xếp câu rõ ràng hơn để tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

範例: Yes, I love singing because I have been passionate about music since childhood. For example, I often sing with my family, which helps us bond and express our emotions.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý đến cách dùng mạo từ và cấu trúc câu, ví dụ 'an A formal class' nên là 'a formal class'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có thể ngắn gọn và rõ ràng hơn để tránh lặp từ.

範例: I have never taken a formal singing class, but I have learned by watching YouTube tutorials. I hope to join more classes in the future to improve my vocal skills.

建議: Câu trả lời có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ như 'way way to'. Bạn nên sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

範例: I enjoy singing for my friends and family because it strengthens our relationships and helps us understand each other's emotions and music preferences. Sometimes, we also go to karaoke together for fun.

建議: Câu trả lời hơi ngắn và có phần lặp từ như 'for example' không được tiếp nối. Bạn nên thêm chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn.

範例: Definitely, I believe singing brings happiness and joy to both singers and listeners. For example, when I sing for my family and friends, it creates a joyful atmosphere and strengthens our bonds.

× Therefore singing has always been my favorite activities.

✓ Therefore singing has always been my favorite activity.

The word 'activities' is plural, but 'favorite' is singular, so the noun should be singular to match 'favorite'. 'Activity' is the correct singular form here.

× I often for example, I often sing with my family because it helps us to bond and conduct our emotions.

✓ For example, I often sing with my family because it helps us to bond and express our emotions.

The sentence has redundant and misplaced phrases causing confusion. 'Rearranging the sentence and replacing 'conduct' with 'express' makes it clearer and grammatically correct.'

× I have never actually taken an A formal class, but I have had some self study on YouTube tutorials.

✓ I have never actually taken a formal class, but I have done some self-study using YouTube tutorials.

The article 'an' is incorrectly used before 'A formal class'. It should be 'a formal class' because 'formal' starts with a consonant sound. Also, 'self study' should be hyphenated as 'self-study' and 'had some self study' is better expressed as 'done some self-study'. 'Using' is more appropriate than 'on' for tutorials.

× However, I would love to join more classes in the future in order to improve my vocal and my singing.

✓ However, I would love to join more classes in the future in order to improve my vocals and my singing.

The word 'vocal' is an adjective or noun but here it should be plural noun 'vocals' referring to singing ability. 'Vocals' is the correct plural noun form in this context.

× I would love to sing for my friends and family because it will help us to strengthen our relationship and understand each other emotionally and also our music tastes.

✓ I would love to sing for my friends and family because it will help us strengthen our relationships, understand each other emotionally, and also appreciate our music tastes.

The sentence is long and lacks proper conjunctions and commas. Adding commas and conjunctions improves clarity. 'Strengthen our relationship' should be plural 'relationships' because it refers to multiple people. 'Appreciate' fits better than 'understand' for music tastes.

× I often sing for my friends when we have free time and maybe sometimes we also go to karaoke which is a way way to.

✓ I often sing for my friends when we have free time, and sometimes we also go to karaoke, which is a way to enjoy singing together.

The sentence has repetition ('way way') and is incomplete at the end. Adding commas and completing the sentence improves clarity and correctness.

× Definitely, I believe that singing can bring happiness and ecstasy to both people who sing it and listen to it, for example, and therefore I love to sing for my family and friends.

✓ Definitely, I believe that singing can bring happiness and ecstasy to both people who sing and those who listen to it; therefore, I love to sing for my family and friends.

The sentence is awkward and has misplaced phrases. Removing 'for example' which is unnecessary here and restructuring the sentence with a semicolon and commas improves flow and clarity.