唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some redundancy and hesitations. Try to make your sentences more concise and natural by avoiding repeated words and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I like singing because I often sing at home, such as when I'm taking a shower or washing the dishes. Singing helps me release energy and relieve the pressure from school, so it makes me feel relaxed.

建議: Your answer is unclear and incomplete, with many hesitations and repetitions. Try to answer directly and clearly, and avoid unnecessary fillers. Also, provide complete information and use linking words to organize your ideas.

範例: I haven't formally learned how to sing, but I enjoy singing to relax and relieve stress. Additionally, I have participated in some English competitions that included singing as one of the activities.

建議: Your answer is understandable but contains many fillers and repeated words. Try to speak more fluently and use complete sentences. Also, explain your ideas clearly with appropriate linking words.

範例: I want to sing for my parents on their birthdays because I believe they would feel very grateful and happy to hear my voice on such special occasions.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and better sentence structure. Avoid repeating similar words and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: I believe singing can bring happiness to people, especially when they face difficulties or pressure from school or work. The rhythm and meaningful lyrics of songs can uplift their mood and provide comfort.

× I used to sing at home and singing when I'm taking a shower, singing when I'm washing the dishes.

✓ I used to sing at home and sing when I'm taking a shower, sing when I'm washing the dishes.

The verb form after 'and' should be consistent. Using 'singing' here is incorrect because it breaks the parallel structure. The correct form is the base verb 'sing' to match 'used to sing'.

× Yeah, I think singing can like somehow like release energy, like re release the pressure when you are in school and like, yeah, relax.

✓ Yeah, I think singing can somehow release energy, release the pressure when you are in school, and relax.

The phrase 'can like somehow like release' is redundant and awkward. 'Can' should be followed by the base verb 'release' without 'like'. Also, 're release' is a repetition error. Simplifying improves clarity.

× I haven't learned how to, how to sing, but like, I just, I, I, I like sing just just for relaxing and release pressure.

✓ I haven't learned how to sing, but I just like to sing just for relaxing and releasing pressure.

The phrase 'I like sing' is incorrect; after 'like' we use the infinitive 'to sing' or the gerund 'singing'. Also, 'relaxing and release pressure' should be parallel, so 'releasing' is correct.

× And I also participated in some of the competitions such as like they are like, there were many parts of the English competitions and one of them is.

✓ And I also participated in some competitions, such as there being many parts of the English competitions, and one of them was.

The phrase 'some of the competitions' is acceptable but 'some competitions' is more natural. Also, 'there were many parts' is better expressed as 'there being many parts' in this context. The sentence is incomplete; 'one of them is' should be 'one of them was' to match past tense.

× I wanna sing for my like parents when birthday.

✓ I wanna sing for my parents on their birthday.

The preposition 'when' is incorrect here; 'on' is used for specific days or dates like birthdays. Also, 'my like parents' is awkward; 'my parents' is sufficient.

× I think like in my opinion, my parents who would like very grateful and very happy and very joyful and when they when they hear my voice.

✓ I think, in my opinion, my parents would be very grateful, very happy, and very joyful when they hear my voice.

The phrase 'who would like very grateful' is incorrect. It should be 'would be very grateful'. Also, 'like' is unnecessary here. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Like somehow singing give joyful happiness to people when they are in difficulties or pressure in academic or work.

✓ Like somehow singing gives joyful happiness to people when they are in difficulties or under pressure in academics or work.

The verb 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'singing'. Also, 'pressure in academic or work' is better expressed as 'under pressure in academics or work'.

× And the rhythms and the words inside the song can bring joyful.

✓ And the rhythms and the words inside the song can bring joy.

'Joyful' is an adjective and cannot be used as a noun here. The correct noun form is 'joy'.