唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit long and has some grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and clear by using correct grammar and avoiding redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I like singing very much. I often sing when I am alone at home, especially when I feel sad, because singing helps me feel happier and relaxed.

建議: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to use past tense correctly and avoid unnecessary phrases. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

範例: Yes, I tried to learn singing when I was a child. I joined a coaching center, but it did not go well, so I quit after one week and stopped taking lessons.

建議: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid redundancy and use appropriate vocabulary to explain your feelings.

範例: Honestly, I do not sing for anyone else. I sing to cheer myself up and to relieve stress after a busy day because singing refreshes my mind.

建議: Your answer has some repetition and grammar mistakes. Try to use clear and concise sentences with correct grammar. Use linking words to show contrast or emphasis and provide specific reasons or examples.

範例: I believe singing can bring happiness to many people, although it depends on the individual. For me, singing always brings joy and helps me feel better.

× I basically try to sing when I'm actually alone in home or I'm in a, you know, in a emotional mood because I feel sad.

✓ I basically try to sing when I'm actually alone at home or when I'm, you know, in an emotional mood because I feel sad.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to being at home; it should be 'at home'. Also, 'a emotional' is incorrect because 'emotional' starts with a vowel sound, so the article should be 'an'. These are preposition and article errors (IDs 11 and 22).

× When I was a child, I try to join in a coaching center to learn how to sing.

✓ When I was a child, I tried to join a coaching center to learn how to sing.

The verb 'try' should be in the past tense 'tried' to match the past time frame indicated by 'When I was a child'. Also, 'join in a coaching center' is incorrect; it should be 'join a coaching center' (no 'in'). This is a past tense issue and preposition error (IDs 5 and 11).

× However, it didn't went well and like after one week I quit that center and I stopped going to somewhere to learn.

✓ However, it didn't go well and after one week I quit that center and stopped going somewhere to learn.

After 'didn't', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'went' should be 'go'. Also, 'going to somewhere' is incorrect; it should be 'going somewhere' without 'to'. These are past tense and preposition errors (IDs 5 and 11).

× Honestly I don't want to sing for anyone in the any individual.

✓ Honestly, I don't want to sing for anyone or any individual.

The phrase 'in the any individual' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'anyone or any individual'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12).

× I always try to sing a song for to cheer up my mood and to wrap up all the works and the heavy loads which are on me when I sing it makes my mind refresh full of refresh.

✓ I always try to sing a song to cheer up my mood and to wrap up all the work and heavy loads that are on me. When I sing, it makes my mind feel refreshed and full of energy.

The phrase 'sing a song for to cheer up' is incorrect; it should be 'sing a song to cheer up'. 'Works' should be 'work' as an uncountable noun. 'Which are on me' is better as 'that are on me'. The sentence was run-on and needed to be split for clarity. 'Refresh full of refresh' is incorrect; 'feel refreshed and full of energy' is appropriate. These are preposition, singular/plural, and sentence structure errors (IDs 11, 1, and 26).

× I believe definitely singing can bring a lot of joy to every person, every individual, and it's basically up to them.

✓ I definitely believe singing can bring a lot of joy to every person, every individual, and it's basically up to them.

The adverb 'definitely' should be placed before the verb 'believe' for correct adverb placement. This is an incorrect adverb placement error (ID 20).

× It varies depending person to person, but for me, definitely singing being a lot of happiness to me, to everyone.

✓ It varies from person to person, but for me, definitely singing brings a lot of happiness to me and to everyone.

The phrase 'depending person to person' is incorrect; it should be 'varies from person to person'. 'Singing being a lot of happiness' is incorrect; it should be 'singing brings a lot of happiness'. These are preposition and verb tense errors (IDs 11 and 6).