唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Try to combine your ideas into a coherent response using linking words.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because I believe I have a pleasant voice that makes people happy, and seeing their smiles always cheers me up.

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I haven't taken formal singing lessons, but I often watch online videos to learn and imitate techniques to improve my voice.

建議: Your answer needs clearer structure and more precise vocabulary. Also, correct the phrase 'who will live next year' to express your meaning accurately. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: I would like to sing a song for my English teacher who is moving away next year because I really appreciate all the help he has given me.

建議: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to contrast ideas clearly.

範例: I believe singing can bring happiness; when people hear cheerful songs, they usually smile, whereas sad songs often make them feel sorrowful.

× When I see their joy on their face, I will. I would feel happy.

✓ When I see the joy on their faces, I feel happy.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'I will.' is incomplete and 'I would feel happy.' is conditional without context. Also, 'their face' should be plural 'their faces' to match 'their'. The corrected sentence combines the ideas into a clear, complete sentence using present tense to match the context.

× I haven't really learned how to sing before.

✓ I haven't really learnt how to sing before.

In British English, the past participle of 'learn' is commonly 'learnt' rather than 'learned'. Since the context is likely British English, 'learnt' is preferred here.

× The only thing I do is follow the videos online and try to study and copy them to provide a better voice.

✓ The only thing I do is follow videos online and try to study and copy them to improve my voice.

The phrase 'follow the videos online' is better as 'follow videos online' without 'the' because it refers to videos in general. Also, 'to provide a better voice' is incorrect; 'to improve my voice' is the correct collocation.

× I'd like to sing a song for my teacher, my English teacher who will live next year.

✓ I'd like to sing a song for my teacher, my English teacher who will leave next year.

The word 'live' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'leave' to indicate the teacher will depart next year.

× I really appreciate him that he gave me a lot of help.

✓ I really appreciate him because he has given me a lot of help.

The phrase 'appreciate him that' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'appreciate him because' or 'appreciate that he has given me...'. Also, present perfect 'has given' is appropriate to indicate ongoing relevance.

× I agree that when people hear the song about happiness.

✓ I agree that when people hear songs about happiness,

The original sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. It should be connected to the following clause. Also, 'the song' should be plural 'songs' to generalise the statement.

× There always sounds smile on their face, but when they listen to the about sadness, they often feel grief.

✓ There is always a smile on their faces, but when they listen to songs about sadness, they often feel grief.

'There always sounds smile' is incorrect; the correct form is 'There is always a smile'. Also, 'on their face' should be plural 'on their faces'. 'Listen to the about sadness' is incorrect; it should be 'listen to songs about sadness'.