唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: คำตอบของคุณควรชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น ควรหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำที่ไม่ถูกต้องหรือไม่เหมาะสม เช่น "straight foot" และควรจัดระเบียบประโยคให้สมเหตุสมผลมากขึ้น เช่น อธิบายว่าทำไมการร้องเพลงถึงช่วยให้รู้สึกสบายใจและลดความเครียดได้

範例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel relaxed and happy. I especially enjoy hitting high notes as it helps me release stress and express my emotions.

建議: ควรตอบให้ชัดเจนและลื่นไหลมากขึ้น หลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดที่ไม่จำเป็น เช่น "umm" และ "yeah" มากเกินไป และควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่สมบูรณ์เพื่อให้คำตอบดูเป็นธรรมชาติและน่าสนใจ

範例: Yes, I started learning to sing when I was about five years old. I used to enjoy singing "Twinkle Twinkle Little Star" because it was easy and helped me overcome my shyness.

建議: คำตอบควรชัดเจนและตรงประเด็น หลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำและคำที่ไม่เกี่ยวข้อง เช่น การพูดถึง "my wife" ในคำตอบนี้ไม่สอดคล้องกับคำถาม ควรใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์และเชื่อมโยงกันอย่างมีเหตุผล

範例: I want to sing for my parents on their birthdays because I think it would make them happy and show my appreciation for them.

建議: ควรใช้คำและโครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและชัดเจนมากขึ้น เช่น แทนที่จะพูดว่า "it's like a screaming" ควรอธิบายว่าการร้องเพลงช่วยลดความเครียดอย่างไร และควรหลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดซ้ำและคำที่ไม่จำเป็น

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relieve stress and express their feelings freely through music.

× I really like singing because when I'm singing I feel comfortable and I like to sing a high note because it like a scream when I have a straight foot I really like to sing for a place my stress.

✓ I really like singing because when I'm singing I feel comfortable and I like to sing a high note because it sounds like a scream when I have a straight foot. I really like to sing to relieve my stress.

The original sentence misuses 'like' instead of 'sounds like' to describe the high note. Also, 'for a place my stress' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'to relieve my stress' or 'to release my stress'. The verb 'like' needs to be followed by a verb or noun phrase correctly, and the phrase about stress needs correction for clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I have umm, I learned to sing when I was umm, about 5 years old Yeah.

✓ Yes, I have umm, I learnt to sing when I was umm, about 5 years old. Yeah.

The verb 'learned' is acceptable in American English, but 'learnt' is more common in British English. Since the rest of the transcript uses British English conventions, 'learnt' is preferred. Also, the sentence is missing a period at the end.

× I like to sing a little star.

✓ I like to sing 'Twinkle Twinkle Little Star'.

The phrase 'a little star' is incorrect as it refers to the song 'Twinkle Twinkle Little Star'. The correct way is to use the full song title or put it in quotes to indicate a song name.

× I want to sing for my parents. When? When their birthday.

✓ I want to sing for my parents on their birthday.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used with 'when their birthday'. The correct preposition is 'on' to indicate the time of the event.

× Because I think my my wife is really adorable.

✓ Because I think my parents are really adorable.

The student refers to 'my wife' when the context is about singing for parents. This is likely a pronoun misuse or confusion. The correct pronoun should be 'my parents' to match the context.

× I want to sing for them, for I congratulate them for their birthday.

✓ I want to sing for them to congratulate them on their birthday.

The phrase 'for I congratulate them for their birthday' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'to congratulate them on their birthday'. The preposition 'on' is used with 'birthday' and 'to' indicates purpose.

× Yes, I do, because singing can help people to get more, less stressful because it's like a screaming,

✓ Yes, I do, because singing can help people to be less stressed because it's like screaming,

The phrase 'get more, less stressful' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'be less stressed'. Also, 'like a screaming' is incorrect; it should be 'like screaming' without 'a'.

× Yeah, they can like speak everything and can sing everything out loud.

✓ Yeah, they can speak everything and can sing everything out loud.

The word 'like' is unnecessary and incorrect here. The sentence should be 'they can speak everything and can sing everything out loud' for clarity and correctness.