唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言表达不够自然，存在语法错误，如“lose stress from a hard tough day work”应改为“relieve stress after a hard day at work”。建议简化表达，避免重复，如“relax myself”和“lose stress”意思重复。

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress after a hard day at work.

建議: 回答内容较丰富，但存在语法和表达错误，如“and which it made me feel proud to myself”应改为“which made me feel proud of myself”。建议使用连词使句子更流畅，避免重复表达。

範例: Yes, I started learning to sing when I was about five years old. I took lessons at a music school after my regular classes and practiced songs every day. I even won a singing competition, which made me feel very proud of myself.

建議: 回答中重复提到“friends”，表达不够简洁自然。短语“make me feel more confident to myself”应改为“make me feel more confident”。建议简化句子结构，避免重复。

範例: I want to sing for my friends because it’s a great way to showcase my skills and boost my confidence.

建議: 回答中存在表达错误和拼写错误，如“what saying is to people”应为“what singing is to people”，“seeing”应为“singing”。比喻不够恰当且难以理解。建议使用更简单明了的表达，避免错误。

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and forget their worries in daily life.

× Yes, I like singing so much because it helps me to relax myself and lose stress from a hard tough day work.

✓ Yes, I like singing so much because it helps me to relax and relieve stress from a hard, tough day's work.

这里“relax myself”用法不正确，英语中通常说“relax”而不加反身代词“myself”。另外，“lose stress”应改为“relieve stress”更符合表达习惯。最后，“a hard tough day work”缺少所有格，应为“a hard, tough day's work”。

× I learned how to sing when I was about 5 years old.

✓ I learned how to sing when I was about 5 years old.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× I took lessons at music school after my schoolwork and I practiced some songs every day.

✓ I took lessons at a music school after my schoolwork and practiced some songs every day.

“music school”前缺少冠词“a”，且两个动作主语相同，第二个动作可省略主语以避免重复。

× I even won a singing competition and which it made me feel proud to myself.

✓ I even won a singing competition, which made me feel proud of myself.

“and which it”结构错误，应改为“which”引导非限制性定语从句；“proud to myself”应为“proud of myself”。

× I want to sing for my friends 'cause it's a good way to show my skill to my friends, which could make me feel more confident to myself.

✓ I want to sing for my friends because it's a good way to show my skills to them, which could make me feel more confident.

“'cause”应正式写为“because”；“my skill”应为复数“my skills”；“to my friends”重复且冗余，改为“to them”；“confident to myself”错误，应为“confident”。

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because what saying is to people is what a diamond is to a crown.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because what singing is to people is what a diamond is to a crown.

原句中“what saying is to people”应为“what singing is to people”，动词形式错误。

× It's important for everyone to lose stress in our daily lives, so I think seeing is a good way to relieve our stress.

✓ It's important for everyone to relieve stress in our daily lives, so I think singing is a good way to relieve our stress.

“lose stress”用法错误，应为“relieve stress”；“seeing”应为“singing”，拼写错误。