唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法和表达稍显不自然，且句子较长，建议简化句子结构，避免语法错误，并使用更自然的表达方式。

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. Also, I like noticing my progress as I try to improve.

建議: 回答中时态使用不准确，句子结构复杂且不够流畅，建议使用简单过去时并简化表达，同时增加连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, I joined the music studio at the start of my postgraduate studies. There, I learned a lot about singing from senior students.

建議: 表达不够清晰，语法错误较多，逻辑连接不够自然。建议理清思路，使用正确的语法和连接词，表达更具体。

範例: I want to sing for many people, like my parents and my girlfriend. However, I think singing is the best way to relax, so I mostly sing for myself.

建議: 句子结构不够自然，表达有些重复且不够连贯。建议使用更简洁的句子，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to others, but only if you sing well. Therefore, I need to improve my singing skills to achieve this.

× Oh yes, I like singing because it makes me happy and relax and I can feel my progress in the process of considering how to make it better.

✓ Oh yes, I like singing because it makes me happy and relaxed, and I can feel my progress in the process of considering how to make it better.

这里的'relax'应该用形容词'relaxed'来描述主语的状态，而不是动词原形。因为前面用了'makes me happy'，这里也应该用类似结构'makes me relaxed'，表示使我感到放松。

× Oh yes, at the beginning of my post graduate time I have joined the music studio in our school and I have learned more about singing from my senior brothers in the music studio.

✓ Oh yes, at the beginning of my postgraduate time I joined the music studio in our school and learned more about singing from my senior brothers in the music studio.

这里描述的是过去发生的动作，应该使用一般过去时，而不是现在完成时。'have joined'和'have learned'应改为'joined'和'learned'。

× Oh that's a good question. I want to sing for many people such as my parent and my girlfriend. But in my point if you singing is the best way to feel relaxed. So the people I most want to sing for is myself.

✓ Oh that's a good question. I want to sing for many people such as my parents and my girlfriend. But in my opinion, singing is the best way to feel relaxed. So the person I most want to sing for is myself.

1.'parent'应为复数形式'parents'，因为通常指父母双方。2.'in my point if you singing'应为'in my opinion, singing'，表达观点时用'opinion'。3.'the people I most want to sing for is myself'中，'people'是复数，谓语应为复数，且'myself'用作宾语不合适，改为'so the person I most want to sing for is myself'更准确。

× Oh yes, I really believe singing can bring happiness to other people, but it must be based on your singing is very good. So to realize it I need to improve my singing skills.

✓ Oh yes, I really believe singing can bring happiness to other people, but it must be based on your singing being very good. So to realize it, I need to improve my singing skills.

'based on your singing is very good'结构不正确，应该用动名词短语'being'来连接，改为'based on your singing being very good'。此外，'to realize it'前加逗号更符合书面表达习惯。