唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法和表达稍显不自然，且句子较长且有重复。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并使用更准确的词汇。

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. Also, I like noticing my improvement as I practice.

建議: 回答中时态使用不准确，表达不够简洁。建议使用正确的时态，并简化句子结构，使表达更自然流畅。

範例: Yes, when I started my postgraduate studies, I joined the music studio at my school and learned singing from senior students there.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议注意主谓一致，避免语法错误，并使表达更连贯。

範例: I want to sing for many people, like my parents and my girlfriend. However, I think singing is the best way to relax, so I mostly sing for myself.

建議: 表达中有语法错误且逻辑连接不够自然。建议使用更准确的句型和连接词，使表达更流畅。

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to others, but only if you sing well. Therefore, I need to improve my singing skills to achieve this.

× Oh yes, I like singing because it makes me happy and relax and I can feel my progress in the process of considering how to make it better.

✓ Oh yes, I like singing because it makes me happy and relaxed and I can feel my progress in the process of considering how to make it better.

这里的'relax'应该用形容词'relaxed'来描述感受，而不是动词原形。因为前面用了'makes me happy'，这里也应该用形容词形式来保持结构一致。

× Oh yes, at the beginning of my post graduate time I have joined the music studio in our school and I have learned more about singing from my senior brothers in the music studio.

✓ Oh yes, at the beginning of my postgraduate time I joined the music studio in our school and I learned more about singing from my senior brothers in the music studio.

这里描述的是过去发生的动作，应该使用一般过去时，而不是现在完成时。'have joined'和'have learned'应改为'joined'和'learned'。

× Oh that's a good question. I want to sing for many people such as my parent and my girlfriend. But in my point if you singing is the best way to feel relaxed. So the people I most want to sing for is myself.

✓ Oh that's a good question. I want to sing for many people such as my parents and my girlfriend. But in my point of view, singing is the best way to feel relaxed. So the person I most want to sing for is myself.

'parent'应为复数形式'parents'，因为通常指父母双方。'in my point'应为固定表达'in my point of view'。'if you singing'语法错误，应改为'singing'。'people'指人群，后文指单数应改为'person'。

× Oh yes, I really believe singing can bring happiness to other people, but it must be based on your singing is very good. So to realize it I need to improve my singing skills.

✓ Oh yes, I really believe singing can bring happiness to other people, but it must be based on your singing being very good. So to realize it I need to improve my singing skills.

'based on your singing is very good'结构不正确，应该用动名词短语'being very good'来作宾语补足语，使句子结构正确。